Reviewer: Tigernach Signed [Report This]
Date: August 05 2017 8:03 PM Title: Family and Friends

I've noticed that you seem to have a problem with differentiating between 'passed' and 'past'. Perhaps I can help:

passed: to go by someone or thing; an active verb

past: to go or look beyond someone or something; to refer to what is done, or behind one; an adverb

Ex: "The blonde girl looked passed him and up, still smilling."

Should be: "The blonde girl looked past him and up, still smiling."

Author's Response:

You are absolutely correct and thank you for your assistance! :)

Reviewer: TomSpeedy Signed [Report This]
Date: June 24 2016 9:22 PM Title: Family and Friends

Yay! This story is back! I was expecting Mo's story to come back first, but nonetheless, I can't wait for this adventure.

Nick seems like an introvert. I think of myself as an introvert, so when I witness odd things, I think of weird explanations also.

Haha, when Calista said there was another man in the house, I thought she had like a son, Asha's brother or something. Especially since the title was family and friends.

Asha is definately teasing Nick! I mean, I have seen similar things too in real life. I once saw this girl just lick and suck a lollipop and stare at this guy while she was doing it. (I wish I was that guy. Actually, I wish I was the lollipop.) The guy never even really looked at her despite how attractive she was. I just kept thinking, is she like asking him on a date by doing that, and now I just laugh at my self for thinking like that.

In your other stories where a giantes swallows a guy, I don't think she will swallow a guy in this story. I think the little guys will be too rare to just eat them like that.

I said Asha was teasing big time this chapter, but I still got my eye on Calista. If there is still a Tom in this story, I want him to be with Calista, the dream!

I thought TJ was a guy's name. I was so confused that Asha's friend was TJ. When Asha, said TJ and Nick turned around, I thought the girl's boyfriend was TJ and he showed up behind Nick. It might take some time for me to get used to TJ as this lovely girl.

For sure, I thought Asha was going to put her foot on Nick's crotch or something. When you described the seating and had Nick sit in between Calista and Asha, I thought there was a reason why this happened.

It's similar to when you are on your first day of class and all the seats in the classroom are full except this one seat that is positioned between these 2 lovely ladies.

Or when u go on a flight and your seat just happens to be the middle seat between some gorgeous women. Then in the middle of the night, you wake up and see one of the women just leaning on you as she sleeps and her hands rests on your crotch. As you see this, you get a boner and as your boner grows, her hand moves a little and you are half nervous, half excited.

Just random thiughts, but that's what that lunch scene reminded me of.

I can't wait for the next chapter!

Author's Response:

The redo on Mo is pretty expansive so it will be a bit yet. Why did i think you would have your eye on Calista? TJ short for Taja, you'll get used to it. :) There will be more on Asha yet, of course. I've kind of got Nick like a loner, but feeling isolated he yearns to meet someone he can relate too but is reluctant because of the psychological leftovers from his parents broken marriage. He is confused, angry, hurt. Generally, like most teenagers.