[Report This]Date: November 30 2016 5:02 PM Title: Morning Routine Pt. 4
As much as I love m/m and especially unaware ass plots + micro/nano shrinking, it's a big hard to read this. You are jumping around tenses all the time which isn't allowed in proper writing. If it's simple past, you arent allowed to change it anymore during the whole story. Also I find the chose of words like "in all it’s glory" actually really unerotic and boring, including someone speaking in just a lustful and "horny" way. The thrill and horror aspect is missing in the plot. Still I will follow this and hope for more.
[Report This]Date: November 27 2016 10:10 PM Title: Morning Routine Pt. 5
You keep us in suspense and I know you are doing it on purpose and I love it! As long as this story keeps coming, I will keep reading!
Author's Response:
Haha yes, it seems that somebody has figured me out :)
Date: July 18 2016 1:05 PM Title: Morning Routine Pt. 1
Well done! Can't wait till the next part
[Report This]Date: July 11 2016 10:12 PM Title: Morning Routine Pt. 4
This is fantastic! I cannot get enough! I cannot read these enough! Great!
[Report This]Date: May 27 2016 10:06 PM Title: Morning Routine Pt. 1
Oh, boy. This story is exploring some of my very own thoughts. Good on you and my appetite is whet. Super excited!
[Report This]Date: May 27 2016 10:06 PM Title: Morning Routine Pt. 1
Oh, boy. This story is exploring some of my very own thoughts. Good on you and I my appetite is whet.
Date: May 10 2016 2:07 PM Title: Morning Routine Pt. 1
Is this series going to be continued? Its a very interesting concept and enjoyable to read :)
Author's Response:
Yes it will, I've been a bit busy so the writing slowed down a bit. I should be getting out another chapter tomorrow though.
Date: May 03 2016 9:35 PM Title: Morning Routine Pt. 1
Interesting tags, I doubt though this story will be continued. Surprise me for the better.
Author's Response:
I shall :)
Date: May 03 2016 4:40 PM Title: Morning Routine Pt. 1
The premise sounds interesting, but this chapter was WAY too fast. Try to pace it a little more, whether through more description of the situation, more details in the action, or some combination of both.
Author's Response:
Thanks for the review, when I was writing this, it had felt like to me that I was actually writing too slow and drawing out things longer than I should've, so this is interesting to hear. Chapter 2 is already written so there isn't going to be any change there, but I'll see what I can do with your suggestions for the third chapter. I can't 100% promise anything though, as I have a bit of difficulty with changing my writing habits. I'll try though :)