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Reviewer: youre_my_slave Signed [Report This]
Date: May 16 2016 5:28 PM Title: Murphy's Law

Does she have any motive for shrinking men other than fun?



Author's Response:

Thanks for taking the time to give this story a read. Honestly I haven't devised a motivation for why she does it. I am always open to suggestions. Thanks

Reviewer: thewiking2000 Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: May 15 2016 8:49 AM Title: Precautionary Measures

I'm really enjoying this story. The inital, limited perspective of Josh inside the shoebox builds good tension. The story reminds me, to some extent, of the story "Julia", also found here. Of course, the scenario is a classic one, but both you and the author of "Julia" execute it so well, and it is, after all, all about the execution.


Oh, and this line was gold!

-"...there is no way out of here, well except perhaps through me"



Author's Response:

Thanks for taking the time to read this story and share a review. I love the double meaning of the line you referenced. I will check out Julia  I have come across your moniker attached to some phenomenal digital animation and if you are one in the same your work is outstanding. I hope I can keep this story entertaining and engaging enough to keep your interest. :)

Reviewer: TomSpeedy Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: May 13 2016 8:31 PM Title: Precautionary Measures

Good Title choice.

Another good chapter, but I think you could have extended this one by making her start searching and then end the chapter when she reaches the shelf that Josh and Julian are hiding on. Now that would be a better cliffhanger in my opinion.

Josh should probably help Julian chew. Julian will get tired of chewing soon.

On a side note: Could Tom's story be updated every 2 days just like this story. I know that this story is more fresh and you probably have more ideas to write about. Or perhaps you can write Tom's story every 3 days. Hmm, that won't work. How about making the chapters a tad longer? A new perspective, more emotion, a joke here and there, someone thinking of a fantasy.

I ask that becuase I like the every other day update on this story. It makes these slow parts of a story more managable knowing that I can wait just 2 days to know what is coming next.

Especially if next chapter is like she searches the first 3 shelves, then the chapter after that would be the shelf that Josh is on, then the following chapter about her about to look at the orca. (I'm just joking. I'm sure there will be more action in the next few chapters.)

I can't wait for the next chapter!

Reviewer: JDO Signed [Report This]
Date: May 12 2016 11:48 PM Title: Unfamiliar Places

Dude I don't know how you do it. The consistent churning out of quality material makes my head spin. You've got the makings of a classic going on with this one, and let's be real, we're read a million of these "people abducted by girl who shrinks them" stories so for you to make one unique and also engaging speaks to how good you are. 

 

I like the characters a lot, I'm rooting for them. I was sad with what happened to Ham. I love how clever Josh is and how it's like a race, how long can Josh keep outsmarting their captor? 



Author's Response:

Thanks for taking the time to give this one a read and then share such a flattering review. I hope I can continue to keep this story engaging and entertaining enough to keep you coming back. :)

Reviewer: Rivenscry Signed [Report This]
Date: May 12 2016 4:35 AM Title: Unfamiliar Places

Hey, I'm not minding how it's going so far, but it's a little slow for my taste. There's nothing wrong with a slow build-up, but it's kinda dragging on a bit, with barely anything happening in each chapter.



Author's Response:

Thanks for the input. I appreciate you taking the time to share your thoughts it gives me insight into how the story is being received.  I'll see what I can do to pick it up in the next few chapters.

Reviewer: TomSpeedy Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: May 11 2016 8:12 PM Title: Jonah and the Whale

I hope that orca is like a sex toy for this girl. She probably plays with it everyday and that's why the thread is loose.

If they sew up those threads, and she plays with it, let's just say they are in for a wild ride.

I can't wait for the next chapter!

Reviewer: TomSpeedy Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: May 09 2016 6:18 PM Title: Ham Steak

I called it. Eaten and digested. You do this and all the other men get scared and don't wanna upset her.

I noticed a lot of "Jesus" and "Christ" in this chapter. Like 6 of them total. A bit much compared to most chapters. Nothing wrong with it, it just felt overused and repetitive.

Haha, Han steak. Good one.

Not sure what to expect next, but I can't wait for the next chapter!

Reviewer: SomeRRight Signed [Report This]
Date: May 08 2016 7:49 PM Title: On the Loose

I just read what you have so far. I have to say, you have really mastered the art of pacing. I like it when writers are able to string along the action in longer stories without putting too much up front or making the plot drag.

I also really enjoy the realism of their situation, as well as their varying personalities clashing against one another. Personally, Julian's my favorite so far.

I'll be sure to keep an eye out for updates on this one!



Author's Response:

Thanks for not only reading but taking the time to share a review. I do enjoy a mix of action laden chapters separated by bridging  ones to keep the flow going. Although I wanted to feature Josh as my central protagonist, Julian is undoubtedly the most fun to write for. I hope I am competent enough to keep this tale entertaining enough to keep you interested. :)

Reviewer: TomSpeedy Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: May 07 2016 5:15 PM Title: On the Loose

I'm guessing she eats him.

Of course, if she decides on a more sexy fate, then that would be awesome.

Then again, I have no idea what kind of girl she is. I still don't know her name, haha!

I can't wait for the next chapter!

Author's Response:

We shall soon see how this young beauty treats her runaway. I have a couple of names in mind but the fact we are this many chapters into the story and don't know what to call her is done purposefully.

Reviewer: SheerForce Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: May 06 2016 4:37 PM Title: Seeing is Believing

Sounds like something's about to go down, eh? Looking forward to seeing what that is!

Author's Response:

It does rather sound like something wicked this way comes...

Reviewer: TomSpeedy Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: May 04 2016 6:01 PM Title: Seeing is Believing

Summary of this chapter:

Giantess enters room.

John sees the giantess for the first time and is shocked by her beauty.

Giantess goes to her bed and gets out her box.

The giantess opens the box.

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Other stuff in this chapter:

-Julian brags that he was right about the girl.
-Giantess uses her phone.
-Julian admires her ass.

Yep, that's pretty much the chapter. I expected her to find the tinies and punish one guy this chapter, but knowing you Duggernaut, you like to drag this suspense out for multiple chapters. Haha!

I can't wait for the next chapter!

Author's Response:

Spot on old chap.

Reviewer: SheerForce Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: May 03 2016 4:44 PM Title: Unfamiliar Places

Still quite interesting. Keep on writing :)

Author's Response:

Thanks things will start picking up soon

Reviewer: TomSpeedy Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: May 02 2016 7:46 PM Title: Those Left Behind

Ham is going to die. Why? Well, Julian and Josh are hiding, and I bet Ham just made a mistake to go out right when the giantess is about to arrive.

He probably won't have time to get back inside the box. That's my pick. Ham is the first to be doomed.

All these different opinions are going to get themselves killed. If they can only work as a team....then they have a chance.

I can't wait for the next chapter!

Reviewer: Alman01 Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: May 01 2016 1:59 PM Title: Thinking Outside the Box

Good god, I'd only just finished at chapter 2 before taking a few days break. I come back and suddenly there's 4 more epic new chapters to read! Dude do you even find time to sleep with all this writing you do? xD

 

I meant to say from the start, that this is a great concept you got going. A shoebox of toys under a bed. the premise alone is exciting so I'm super keen to see how this cast of characters are gonna get around such a giant prison-style setting :D

Reviewer: FreemanCD Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: April 28 2016 9:45 PM Title: Thinking Outside the Box

I wanna hear more! I want to get to know these characters. Especially Ham and Carver, they seem like they could be fun characters.

Reviewer: TomSpeedy Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: April 28 2016 5:27 PM Title: Thinking Outside the Box

I should've expected the title to be this, haha!

Hmm. Are the panties the same color as the box? If yes, that's good. Otherwise, it could be a problem. (I know the box has multiple colors, it's just that it might be noticeable from the outside.)

Hiding behind a shelf of toys. You know what would be kinky? She has a sex doll that looks just like a tiny man, and she picks one of these guys thinking it's her doll.

Or they hide INSIDE a sex doll and she uses it, giving them quite an experience.

Well, here comes the giantess!

I can't wait for the next chapter!

Reviewer: TomSpeedy Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: April 26 2016 5:33 PM Title: Back in the Box

Ok, now this chapter seems awfully familiar. But from where? Ah yes, The Nefarious Nine. I guess this story is like the sequel.

Why is this familiar? Well, these guys found an opening in their "environment" and this is basically the same "escape" as what happened in Nefarious nine. Except instead of a toy prison, it's a shoebox.

What's with you and tiny guys trying to escape out of boxes? Lol.

This chapter made me just roll my eyes half of the time. There's the typical group that is not courageous and then there's the reckless dude who says "fuck it" and does anything he wants. Also, it's always the cat. Never a dog or any other animal. People are always scared of the giant cat. Lastly, the scared dude turns Julian and Josh's adventure into a scouting trip.

The escape sequences seem to be redundant but I'm loving the diologue, creativity, and suspense you create at the end of each chapter.

I really want to know what happens next, especially since they mention its nightfall, and always the scary stuff happens at night fall.

I can't wait for the next chapter!

Author's Response:

Except the Nefarious Nine, the felons were offing each other faster than the giantesses, lol. I think there are certainly some cliche repetitve elements in the genre and trying to keep it fresh is sometimes difficult but hopefully this one is at least fresh enough to keep readers engaged.

Reviewer: SheerForce Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: April 26 2016 4:21 PM Title: Unfamiliar Places

Well......I still like this. The lack of reviews compared to your other works is surprising, but that'll improve with time- don't get discouraged.

Author's Response:

Lol, thanks for the encouragement  :) I am glad i have been able to keep it lively enough to keep you coming back.

Reviewer: TomSpeedy Signed [Report This]
Date: April 25 2016 5:46 PM Title: Unfamiliar Places

One last thing. Is every girl a blonde? (I mean in all of your stories. Hoping the next giantess is a brunette.)

Author's Response:

How quickly they forget... Selene, Clarice, Samira, Anna, Vanessa, Gennifer,  the list goes on and on. Tess. There will be more than giantess in this story and not all of them will be blonde.

Reviewer: TomSpeedy Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: April 25 2016 5:44 PM Title: The Girl in the Tight Pants

Hmm. I love how realistic that library scene was. If I was alone with her, I think I would've reacted the same way. Only difference is that I tend to say "sorry" a lot and I may have apologized instead of babbling. I don't think this girl takes honest guys, I think she would only pick me if I lied. Then she would feel better shrinking me. I should start lying to get shrunken down. :)

Josh keeps overthinking his situation in the box. He just needs to relax and wait.

Hopefully the giantess stuff shows up soon, becuase that tends to be an issue you have. Nonetheless, the background and setting are interesting.

I can't wait for the next chapter!

Author's Response:

Sooner than later our resident giantess will appear. Josh is still trying to figure out what's happening. He has yet to fully commit to believing

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