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Reviewer: TomSpeedy Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: May 30 2016 9:54 PM Title: The Girls Return

Didn't the phone record them getting into the bathroom? I'm sure it would've kept on recording until they came back into the room.

How does the camera from a phone be able to see Julian pissing? If the cameras were on the edge of the wall, a tiny person would be kinda hard to spot. I can't imagine Julian's piss to be that visible. It should look kinda transparent.

Instead of all this time leading up to the bathroom, I was expecting: "let's check out the video!" "Oh, look, they went into the bathroom." Then the rest of the chapter would be them searching most of the places and soon they find a spot that they didn't think of which is where the guys are hiding.

Well, I'm sure that they will be found next chapter. Unless next chapter is then searching the bathroom, and it ends with the girls checking the last final spot. Lol, I hope the action starts next.

I can't wait for the next chapter!

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