Reviewer: combine45 Signed [Report This]
Date: April 28 2016 3:36 PM Title: The Sacrifice/The Downfall

I really like how you wrote path 1 you really ilustrated the hoplessnes of their situation. However I'm going to have to agree with everyone else and say I lerfer path 2 it seems more in keeping with the adventure that this character is going on. I think it works to keep him going through various environments and dangers and seeing different sized giantesses. The prison setting was well done i just would perfer for the story to keep moving if that makes sense.

Reviewer: Stubbornstain Signed [Report This]
Date: April 26 2016 3:04 PM Title: The Sacrifice/The Downfall

Both paths seem kind of rushed. You can feel the indecisiveness. As to which path I prefer, it's hard to say. I'd like to think that Amy is still alive, so maybe you can give readers that hope which they can cling to? Even if it's a false sense of hope. I don't want her to die. I felt sad when she died.

 

I wonder about the toes too. Does that giantess give birth to the others? Does she even have any special powers besides being big? What can she do, if anything, that an ordinary giantess, or even human, if her size cannot do? And, surely, she can't stay in the same position forever, can she?

 

I am sure that you'll explain this all in more detail later. I like the story and I want to see it succeed. Keep at it!