Date: March 22 2016 6:33 PM Title: First Part - Chapter 3 & 4 - 'A new life' and 'The shoe shiner'
J'aime, continue c'est très bien. Un peu long à décoller, mais la suite en vaut la peine.
Date: March 18 2016 2:36 PM Title: Prologue and First Part - Chapter 1 and 2.
Holy grumpy green monsters, I'm seriously jealous...you speak 6 languages?
I tried to learn French and Polynesian and gave up on anything but English.
You should give some serious thought to writing beacause you definitely have an
apptitude for it; you certainly seem to have a way with English so by all means
continue this story and keep the action coming. Keeps your readers interested.
Author's Response:
I loved that "Holy grumpy green monsters"; I might use it sometime if you're ok with that. I really speak 6 languages, I studied opera for several years so I had many language classes (German, French, and Italian), as a Mexican I speak both Spanish and English and I've lived in other countries where I improved my French and learnt Russian. Polynesian sounds hard but I'd bet it is a very interesting language. If you like litterature, I recommend learning French, it is very beautiful to read the great French writers in their native language like Beaudelaire, Dumas, Camus, and Victor Hugo. It's a fun hobby. I'm glad you liked how I write, I enjoyed writing for you as well. Also, I've been reading your stories as well, I really liked The Clone! and I appreciate that you encourage me to write. It means a lot to me.
I just posted Chapters 2 and 3 to my story if you feel like reading my again. I hope you like it.
Date: March 16 2016 2:09 AM Title: Prologue and First Part - Chapter 1 and 2.
Holy craap that was so good honestly keep it coming and I agree with the bad breath thing but like it doesn't always have to be bad breath necciscerally but yeah really good and it flows nicely with the different languages, I'm wondering do you actually speak French?
Author's Response:
I'm really glad you liked it! It means a lot to me. And yes, I actually speak English, French, Spanish, German, and a little bit of Russian and Italian, but since I don't have many opportunities to practice any other language other than Spanish, all my other languages have seriously deteriorated. Do you speak French yourself? I hope I'll be adding the next two chapters today or tomorrow and hopefully they'll be better than this one. Thank you very much for reading me.
Date: March 15 2016 5:09 PM Title: Prologue and First Part - Chapter 1 and 2.
Off to a solid start! Great detail and a unique setting. If I had to critisize, maybe include a translation in parenthasis or at the end of the chapter so readers don't have to switch over to a translator that might lose the meaning.
Looking forward to more!
P.S. I LOVE preds with bad breath >_<
Author's Response:
Hey! Thank you for taking the time to post a review, as you can see, I'm new to all this and would like some guidance. I considered adding the translations but I figured that since the main character doesn't understand them, readers shouldn't either, but maybe I should add the translations to make it easier to read. I'm glad you liked the breath part, I didn't intentionally write it, I just tried to figure out how a normal breath would smell at that size, but since you liked it, I'll keep it coming. Thanks for reading me.