Reviewer: aaron Signed [Report This]
Date: June 11 2016 2:51 AM Title: Chapter 10: Fear the Reaper

Holy shit!! I can't believe I just watched Terminator & Terminator 2: Judgment Day before I read this, lol.
That sneak attack was inspired and perfectly executed(both literally and literarily). However, unlike Terminator these cyborgs were once human and that is yet another thing that you've written perfectly(really liked the emotion displayed when Gabby discovered Ricardo). The final scene when Malcolm recognizes the traitor through me for a loop(still believe at least one traitor is Dixie) because Dixie was in that other battle at the time so maybe it was the guy who Gabby took under her wing, forgot his name unfortunately.(I'm pretty sure he was from that rescued concentration camp but his name is still a blur and it's really bugging me)

Anyways, can we take a moment and welcome back Derek!! Mister Badass Personified. I was so apprehensive about reading further when he showed up because I was so sure he was gonna die, again, in some heroic fashion. Glad he didn't, btw.

I wonder why cyborg/Ricardo recognized Derek's name though.. Unless they met previously but Derek didn't seem to know him from a ham sandwich so I wonder if who ever was looking through Ricardo's eyes knew Derek to be dead. That only could be Aviel, but that whole Ricardo flinching/pausing when hearing his name just brings up more questions.

Overall fantastic chapter and I can't wait to see what happens next. Hope the traitor(s) reveal isn't too many more chapters away.

aaron
PS I just don't understand why was Hans and the others from the beginning outside of Rome's protective walls? Seems like a god awful place to be especially in times of war.
If they weren't outside the walls I most likely missed a crucial detail. That was the only part I could've used more clarity.

Author's Response:

Glad you liked it, and the kid you are thinking of is Roan. He isn't the traitor as he was the kid who pushed William out of the way of Richardo and got sliced. I didn't say his name as Derek didn't know it.

 

Rome doesn't have walls its more like a defensive line from WWII, foxholes, some hidden weapons, etc... They were part of said defense and weremeant to help the full-sized guns fend off a Society attack, but were never planned to resist a surprise attack from a shrunken force.