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Reviewer: Carycomic Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: May 01 2016 9:46 AM Title: Chapter 7: Distrust and Tattered Alliance

Well, Fitchett the Idjit becomes Suspect # 1 as to who the head traitor might be. But, the way Captain Freeman keeps protesting, I'd have to say that the first suspect is a little too obvious. So, I favor Freeman becomes the slightly stronger possibility as Suspect # 2.

OH! And for the lurkers, under age 21, who might be reading this? The above tic-tac-toe symbol has meant "number" far longer than it's meant "hash tag."

Reviewer: Michael11 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: April 30 2016 1:32 PM Title: Chapter 7: Distrust and Tattered Alliance

Thanks for filling my dose of "After Shrink High" for maybe a week :P


Darius  just can't stop himself from giving the "Sanders our Hero" train an upgrade after another^^

"How did they learn his name?" Terence asked half to Dixie and half to himself."
Such a good question^^

"Yes...well you already myself and the Commander so why do-"
Typo? -> Word missing between "already" and "myself"?

"Their not in substantial numbers"
Typo? -> "Their" should be "They're"?

Great that the society is still !actively! working against them and not just waiting for them to come

"The rage that had carried him over seemed to smack right into a wall of cement, leaving Terence unsure what to do."
Hehe... ah Darius : D

"The Phoenixes are right about the traitor. I know... because I was one of them."
Wow... didn't expect him to actually have the SPINE to come out with the truth by HIMSELF!
Also really liked the way the society got to the mayor.

"their anger at Darius forgotten."
... ; D

"OR SELL US INTO SLAVERY TO THIS MONSTERS"
Typo? -> "this" -> "these"?

"P- please. There... there is-"
probably something important...
"Wait, we should hear him out,"
YES!!!

"Let me do SOMETHING to make those..those MURDERERS pay! PLEASE!"
"But it did put more than a few points in the “let him live” category."
: )

"Terence's glare shifted to look at him and the Captain clamped his mouth shut tighter than a oil drum."
: D : D

"The reaction was quick and nasty as all four yelled in almost unison, ..."
Darius just can't stop haha : D

"William had a feeling this plan was going to run into trouble"
as it almost always does : /

William still preparing Samantha : )

"You are your workers are exempt from that order."
Typo? -> Point or Comma missing?

"seemed to hide a smilel"
Typo

"And not all of that war will be fought in the light..."
as it should be ; )

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