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Date: November 08 2017 7:00 PM Title: Chapter 17: The Trap

"Freeman." Heh! What an ironic alias for a traitorous bitch.

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Date: November 08 2017 6:54 PM Title: Chapter 16: Traitors

Oh, crap!

Frying pan? Meet fire.

Reviewer: littless Signed [Report This]
Date: November 07 2017 7:56 PM Title: Chapter 17: The Trap

It's back! I hope you keep it going. It's been so long I have to go back and reread stuff here, but that's ok. I love this story. Keep it up!

Reviewer: Hubble Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: June 09 2017 6:37 AM Title: Prologue

I hope this gets continued :v

Still one of the most incredible series I've read here, would love to see it finished (even though I also kind of never want it to finish, heh).

Reviewer: Recoveringlurker Signed [Report This]
Date: January 20 2017 12:52 AM Title: Prologue

To see that flonne is still fighting for
The good guys is great. I was actually suprised by that. Now that I know she has been fighting behind the scenes I am hoping she has helped sanders' family somehow because I know they can be leveraged against him at some point

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Date: January 13 2017 8:06 AM Title: Chapter 15: Reunion

Absolutely loved this chapter!

Pyrrha has hit the nail right on the head when she verbally dismantled Aviel so analytically, I celebrated it quite hard.

Incredibly jealous of your ability to tell stories and to give so much depth to your characters. Can't help but catching myself hoping for a new chapter each time it has been a few weeks. Your story is alive.

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Date: January 12 2017 2:15 AM Title: Chapter 15: Reunion

Awesome chapter! I'm glad Fionne didn't lose herself like Aviel did, it really gives a glimmer of hope to Sanders' situation to see that he still has friends on the other side! Anyway based on what you say at the end of this chapter I'm assuming theres gonna be an act 4? How long are you planning this story to be?

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Date: January 11 2017 3:10 PM Title: Chapter 15: Reunion

So, Terence _isn't_ the traitor?


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Date: January 11 2017 3:03 PM Title: Chapter 14: CounterAttack

And, so, the end begins. :-|

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Date: December 22 2016 5:55 AM Title: Chapter 14: CounterAttack

Good chapter. The ending has me really looking forward to the next chapter to see how Flonne has changed mentally since Act 1.

Reviewer: geeman Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: December 10 2016 4:58 AM Title: Chapter 14: CounterAttack

Another great chapter! I'm glad to see Dionne again even if it's in this state! It's felt like this story has been stuck in Rome for a while huh? Don't wanna say it's dragging on but it feels that way sometimes. And again, the slice of life stuff from the beginning of the chapter are y favorite, especially the small amount of Sanders X Pyrra stuff we got! Hope you update again soon!

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Date: December 09 2016 5:38 PM Title: Chapter 14: CounterAttack

Glad to see this story isn't dead. Looking forward to more. 

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Date: October 07 2016 2:32 PM Title: Chapter 13: Winter is Coming

Ooooh! The tinies are going on the counter-offensive? Nice!!!

As for those pesky real-life concerns? Like I said in my previous review, feel free to make this the end of Act 3 and the next chapter, the opener for Act 4.

Reviewer: geeman Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: October 07 2016 11:51 AM Title: Chapter 13: Winter is Coming

Yes. Abit of downtime! Pyrra saying 'mecha pyrra' was the funniest thing I've read in a while! Anyways great chapter! Hope to see u update soon but I get that real life comes first!

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Date: July 16 2016 4:27 PM Title: Chapter 12: The Long Haul

Hey! If anybody's earned a couple weeks vacation from this, it's you. In fact, if it helps, you could make this chapter the end of Act 3. Thereby allowing your next update to be the opening chapter of Act 4!

As regards this chapter? Jody's confession was suitably startling. Did not see that coming, at all! I also liked Samantha's brevet promotion. She can now command troops and, yet, still feel like an enlisted grunt.*

*The perfect compromise for sexist traditionalists like Major Freeman. :-)

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Date: July 16 2016 3:22 PM Title: Chapter 12: The Long Haul

Sort of a boring chapter to be honest, I was hoping that since we got abit of downtime we'd get some sander x pyrra time but no dice. Oh well. It was well written tho, I DID like the part with Gabby, it really struck a cord with me, I guess she's not an invincible steel woman after all...Everyone has their breaking point. Anyway, kinda sucks that we wont be getting another chapter for a while but i'll be keeping an eye out for this short story of yours...

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Date: July 07 2016 6:51 PM Title: Chapter 11: Hold the Line

You know what's funny? Ollie somehow wormed his way through and survived all 3 acts.

Also, what happened to Morgan? She only appeared in Act 1, and I'm wondering if she's gonna make an appearance in this act.

Author's Response:

Well Ollie is just a radioman and tends to stay well away from the battlefield. Helps keep himself safe and not caught in the wrong place at the wrong time.


And that is a good question which we will be answered. All I will say, is we haven't seen the last of Morgan.

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Date: July 07 2016 6:24 PM Title: Prologue

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Date: July 03 2016 1:11 PM Title: Chapter 11: Hold the Line

Excellent chapter! I could almost picture what was happening in my head like a Hollywood movie right down to that cheesy melee fight with the last villain. You're one of the few writers on this site that can do action scenes properly, the words and descriptions are near perfect. Anyway, I'm glad we're getting abit of downtime next chapter, I'm hoping for some Pyrra X Sanders shennanegans myself but whatever you gave planned will be good reads no doubt!

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Date: July 03 2016 11:32 AM Title: Chapter 11: Hold the Line

A chapter-length display of fireworks and victorious freedom-fighting. Highly appropriate for July 4th weekend! :-)

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