Date: January 20 2017 12:52 AM Title: Prologue
To see that flonne is still fighting for
The good guys is great. I was actually suprised by that. Now that I know she has been fighting behind the scenes I am hoping she has helped sanders' family somehow because I know they can be leveraged against him at some point
Date: January 13 2017 8:06 AM Title: Chapter 15: Reunion
Absolutely loved this chapter!
Pyrrha has hit the nail right on the head when she verbally dismantled Aviel so analytically, I celebrated it quite hard.
Incredibly jealous of your ability to tell stories and to give so much depth to your characters. Can't help but catching myself hoping for a new chapter each time it has been a few weeks. Your story is alive.
Date: January 12 2017 2:15 AM Title: Chapter 15: Reunion
Awesome chapter! I'm glad Fionne didn't lose herself like Aviel did, it really gives a glimmer of hope to Sanders' situation to see that he still has friends on the other side! Anyway based on what you say at the end of this chapter I'm assuming theres gonna be an act 4? How long are you planning this story to be?
Date: December 10 2016 4:58 AM Title: Chapter 14: CounterAttack
Another great chapter! I'm glad to see Dionne again even if it's in this state! It's felt like this story has been stuck in Rome for a while huh? Don't wanna say it's dragging on but it feels that way sometimes. And again, the slice of life stuff from the beginning of the chapter are y favorite, especially the small amount of Sanders X Pyrra stuff we got! Hope you update again soon!
Date: October 07 2016 2:32 PM Title: Chapter 13: Winter is Coming
Ooooh! The tinies are going on the counter-offensive? Nice!!!
As for those pesky real-life concerns? Like I said in my previous review, feel free to make this the end of Act 3 and the next chapter, the opener for Act 4.
Date: July 16 2016 4:27 PM Title: Chapter 12: The Long Haul
Hey! If anybody's earned a couple weeks vacation from this, it's you. In fact, if it helps, you could make this chapter the end of Act 3. Thereby allowing your next update to be the opening chapter of Act 4!
As regards this chapter? Jody's confession was suitably startling. Did not see that coming, at all! I also liked Samantha's brevet promotion. She can now command troops and, yet, still feel like an enlisted grunt.*
*The perfect compromise for sexist traditionalists like Major Freeman. :-)
Date: July 16 2016 3:22 PM Title: Chapter 12: The Long Haul
Sort of a boring chapter to be honest, I was hoping that since we got abit of downtime we'd get some sander x pyrra time but no dice. Oh well. It was well written tho, I DID like the part with Gabby, it really struck a cord with me, I guess she's not an invincible steel woman after all...Everyone has their breaking point. Anyway, kinda sucks that we wont be getting another chapter for a while but i'll be keeping an eye out for this short story of yours...
Date: July 07 2016 6:51 PM Title: Chapter 11: Hold the Line
You know what's funny? Ollie somehow wormed his way through and survived all 3 acts.
Also, what happened to Morgan? She only appeared in Act 1, and I'm wondering if she's gonna make an appearance in this act.
Well Ollie is just a radioman and tends to stay well away from the battlefield. Helps keep himself safe and not caught in the wrong place at the wrong time.
And that is a good question which we will be answered. All I will say, is we haven't seen the last of Morgan.
Date: July 07 2016 6:24 PM Title: Prologue
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Date: July 03 2016 1:11 PM Title: Chapter 11: Hold the Line
Excellent chapter! I could almost picture what was happening in my head like a Hollywood movie right down to that cheesy melee fight with the last villain. You're one of the few writers on this site that can do action scenes properly, the words and descriptions are near perfect. Anyway, I'm glad we're getting abit of downtime next chapter, I'm hoping for some Pyrra X Sanders shennanegans myself but whatever you gave planned will be good reads no doubt!
Date: June 11 2016 2:51 AM Title: Chapter 10: Fear the Reaper
Holy shit!! I can't believe I just watched Terminator & Terminator 2: Judgment Day before I read this, lol.
That sneak attack was inspired and perfectly executed(both literally and literarily). However, unlike Terminator these cyborgs were once human and that is yet another thing that you've written perfectly(really liked the emotion displayed when Gabby discovered Ricardo). The final scene when Malcolm recognizes the traitor through me for a loop(still believe at least one traitor is Dixie) because Dixie was in that other battle at the time so maybe it was the guy who Gabby took under her wing, forgot his name unfortunately.(I'm pretty sure he was from that rescued concentration camp but his name is still a blur and it's really bugging me)
Anyways, can we take a moment and welcome back Derek!! Mister Badass Personified. I was so apprehensive about reading further when he showed up because I was so sure he was gonna die, again, in some heroic fashion. Glad he didn't, btw.
I wonder why cyborg/Ricardo recognized Derek's name though.. Unless they met previously but Derek didn't seem to know him from a ham sandwich so I wonder if who ever was looking through Ricardo's eyes knew Derek to be dead. That only could be Aviel, but that whole Ricardo flinching/pausing when hearing his name just brings up more questions.
Overall fantastic chapter and I can't wait to see what happens next. Hope the traitor(s) reveal isn't too many more chapters away.
PS I just don't understand why was Hans and the others from the beginning outside of Rome's protective walls? Seems like a god awful place to be especially in times of war.
If they weren't outside the walls I most likely missed a crucial detail. That was the only part I could've used more clarity.
Glad you liked it, and the kid you are thinking of is Roan. He isn't the traitor as he was the kid who pushed William out of the way of Richardo and got sliced. I didn't say his name as Derek didn't know it.
Rome doesn't have walls its more like a defensive line from WWII, foxholes, some hidden weapons, etc... They were part of said defense and weremeant to help the full-sized guns fend off a Society attack, but were never planned to resist a surprise attack from a shrunken force.
Date: May 30 2016 6:04 AM Title: Prologue
Would be interesting to find out how Terrence would react if Dixie was the traitor.
Now I realize that in the world of covert espionage that the most obvious choice is not necessarily the right choice. However, in one of the chapters at the end there was something to the fact that 'just because you're bigger than me doesn't mean you can give me orders, I outrank you'. This immediately tells me that the traitor is not only a female but a high ranking society member to boot. Dixie was also privy to all the secret locations for those poor shadow saps whom were intercepted by society. Also that mysterious phone call, which caused what's-his-face to lead his troops to their death, was on a secure line and untraceable which could only be one person(in my mind)
IF it were her it makes sense why she'd want a 'voice changer' when she gave the mayor his orders.
I hope she isn't just a red herring and the real traitor is somebody whom we've never seen or heard of yet.(I'm always disappointed when things like that happen in books/stories)
Now if it was something like so-and-so was the traitor to get in the society's good graces to hopefully be rewarded with the rank of giantess.
Sorry for that but I've been at the edge of my seat with these last few chapters. Had all these weird theories flying through my head while I desperately try to make sense of it.
Anyways phenomenal chapter and I can't wait to read more.
PS has Gabby met Dixie yet, for that matter has Sanders? I'm trying to give my crackpot theory some validity, lol.
Date: May 28 2016 2:56 AM Title: Chapter 9: After Action Suspicions
Kinda sad about Fionne, she's just caught in the middle of all this, she's completely innocent. But of course she's also extremely dangerous so you can't just feel soory for her and not defend yourself! Speaking of Fionne, I remember when she went to the get together with Sanders',family. I wonder how his folks are doing? Knowing how ruthless the Society can be makes me think they might be dead already, but I hold out hope that Aviel, despite all this has the decency to remember that they don't control the actions of their son. I hold out hope that at least she keeps them safe keeping in mind how well they treated her in the good ol days. Anyway, most of the resistance stuff doesn't intertest me too much, I've always been vocal about finding most of them forgettable. And of course the few of them I kinda like, you tend to kill off.