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Reviewer: SheerForce Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: June 18 2016 10:07 PM Title: Lessgo!

Still a fun story :)

Reviewer: AdamX Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: June 18 2016 7:27 PM Title: New Girl :o

Nikki is just wonderful.

Reviewer: HuzToru Signed [Report This]
Date: May 19 2016 7:32 PM Title: Lessgo!

The emotes add a nice touch to the story.

Reviewer: v00d002001 Signed starstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: May 15 2016 2:14 AM Title: Socksss

Great start to the story! Really enjoying the feet and emo girl bits. I'd love to be in that position, in a sock, under sexy sweaty toes! Hope the story continues like this, maybe with some more sexual content! 



Author's Response:

I haven't really decided whether I'll pursue more straight up sex. Could, though.

Reviewer: SheerForce Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: May 15 2016 12:18 AM Title: Lessgo!

YYYYYYYEEEEEEEAAAAAAAHHHHHHH I'm pretty pumped rn :)

Reviewer: SheerForce Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: May 13 2016 2:36 AM Title: Lessgo!

It'd be nice to see this story continued, I need the cuteness to flow through me :)

Author's Response:

You got your wish c:

Reviewer: Juliet Signed starstarstar [Report This]
Date: January 16 2016 7:51 PM Title: Lessgo!

Your base idea for this story is something that I can envision as appealing to the audience you were aiming for: /d/, but your execution is painful and misguided.

The narrative itself is perfectly standard for your previous stories. As usual it's so squeaky clean and scrubbed of character that you've left nothing to complain about, and that flaw in itself is incredibly common on this website. I, myself, suffer from it as well, so honestly you would have to go above and beyond to circumvent that issue. I guess it isn't a big deal to anyone but me.

Where your real issue lies is, as stated earlier, your execution. Everything unique and erotic lies in the portrayal of your giantess, and this is where you've failed, for the time being. Your descriptions of this girl, Nikki, feel so "read", like you picked it up from an entry on "emo" from urbandictionary. I don't think you actually researched on any culture or fashion behind the emo aesthetic, you just wrote whatever came to mind. I won't deny that there could be someone out there resembling in taste to your giantess, but ultimately the person you've created lacks uniqueness.

The use of emoticons really gets under my skin, not because the idea itself is inherently bad, but because you use it as an excuse to write a flat character. Nothing about Nikki's dialogue screams "emo" to me except her emoticons. You've used them as a crutch. Instead of actually writing a person, you just made the emoticons all that the person is. That in itself is a failed execution of your idea.

As before, the writing itself is above average for this website, but still nothing special. The real issue here is that, unless you clean it up by the next chapter, you're squandering a perfectly fine idea. That alone is worse than just a bad idea.

Author's Response:

Thanks for your review. I think you and I have different ideas of what I'm trying to write here. I don't go into this writing a 'giantess' and going for outwardly erotic things. 

I think it's the first chapter, and I really do feel you on the whole 'lack of character' and 'basics' deal. I'm partly basing this off of people I know (including myself) so you can blame them for being generic. Everything you write is gonna end up being at least a bit stereotypical, and I was purposefully writing this with almost meme-level cute emote spam.

As for plot being 'basic,' well, wait for the next few chapters. I literally just spent 1000 words in what's about 5 minutes of real time, a quarter of which were spent on describing a shoe box. So needless to say, we didn't get far yet.

Reviewer: youre_my_slave Signed [Report This]
Date: January 16 2016 12:40 PM Title: Lessgo!

tumblr... weeb... flashbacks... *ded*
I CAN PLAY THIS GAME TOO! >:3c >:3c >:3c >:3c >:3c >:3c See? SEE?!
Is there a chance that the captive chick was a member of some tiny race and just reeeaaaalllyyyy unlucky?

Author's Response:

Nah. I'll elaborate one what's going on, but essentially it's an idea for a very, uh, unique virus that's been affecting people. It's unlike the usual 'oh no a shrinking virus' and I think you'll like it. Not sure if I'll actually incorporate the description into the story or make it a part of a series and put the primer in there.

Reviewer: Trap Signed [Report This]
Date: January 16 2016 8:02 AM Title: Lessgo!

All these adorbs

Nice style going on here, in terms of the different type of girl and writing. The narration feels a bit more conversational and personal with this tone. Interested in seeing where it goes.



Author's Response:

Literally everything I do is conversational, right?



Author's Response:

Literally everything I do is conversational, right?

Reviewer: AdamX Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: January 16 2016 1:19 AM Title: Lessgo!

I am very curious to see her back story, so cute and bubbly but something seems to boil underneath.



Author's Response:

Everybody's got a secret.

She doesn't have shrinking powers, though, if that's what your thinking.

Reviewer: MasterOfMicro Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: January 16 2016 12:30 AM Title: Lessgo!

This was cute

too cute

remove



Author's Response:

Mwah ha ha, let the cuteness flow through you c:

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