Date: September 10 2018 8:02 AM Title: Chapter 1 A Quasi Repaired Mind
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Date: December 03 2015 9:22 AM Title: Chapter 2
Choosing to let us imagine the look of the main character is normal but this is for a woman when most of us are men, its quite a bold move. Hope it works and this world you've made, the idea that magic is legal and known is some what surprising to me.
Date: November 30 2015 9:50 AM Title: Chapter 1 A Quasi Repaired Mind
Seems good so far. My only advice is when doing first person to imputed more of the five senses than just sight. What does yor cheracter smell when entering a room? what taste doe the air have? What does the fabric feel like when she sits on a couch. Probably the hardest thing about first person is to give enough detail about the surroundings with out causing sensory overload.
Thatsjust my imputed though form reading countless stories and books. As of today I have yet to accomplish more than a page when trying to write a story.
Date: November 30 2015 9:41 AM Title: Chapter 1 A Quasi Repaired Mind
Wow, nice start! I like where this is going, seems this is a giantess( not now but I imagine he got shrunk quite a bit in the past) trying to make amends. A rare thing to see on the site. Cannot to see the rest of it!