Reviews For Unaware Mom
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Reviewer: zol Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: November 26 2015 9:06 PM Title: Getting to know mom

Really liked it so far, keep it up!! great to see some unaware butt/pnaties plots. hope it goes into lots of more gross stuff, would love seeing tome toilet parts, and her maybe not wiping properly. Also not sure what you had in mind would love him shrink even more into dust particle size, would be the most horrifying thing when he's stuck back there and the panties get sind rocket hard up into his mothers ass.

Reviewer: mikeesan Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: November 24 2015 8:39 PM Title: Getting to know mom

Im giving this 10 points because there are way too little unaware stories out there especially with micro and nano shrinking sizes and butt plots. I also read your other story Giantess World and really liked it. I have one thing to critisim though: You seem to rush really badly on the good parts and have some kind of diary writing style like for example here: "My whole body was swallowed and her ass cheeks wrapped back around me containing me. She then opened the stall door and I felt her walking again. Since she had just pooped, it smelled even worse then before. Her leftover feces had dried onto my body. I even had accidentally swallowed some. I puked again." it sounds really compressed like in a diary, like "I went to my room. I sat down. I started to read a book. I had finished reading.", see what I mean? I totally would have loved if you had written things like him trying to get away but just laying there listening to the horrible noises going, like the silence, then a sudden splash of a dump of her hitting the water, how this all would reflect in his mind, literally rendering him paralized. Then how she would have wiped, maybe just used a single toilet paper meaning not giving a proper wipe at all. And then the most important parts you totally left out or just mentioned in a few words, how she would send her panties up again, and what would awaits him while the flushing of the toilet would be in the background, how he would notice her anus not being properly wiped, and then how he would get some shit in his face by a total sudden move of her, and how he would gag and accidentally swallow a bit, how he would vomit, and so on. You totally should try to improve it towards a more detailed and less "narrative" writing style. I would love seeing some darker toilet humor stuff again if possible, I love ass insertion so much, especially if its unaware. Keep up the great work, this story is totally on my radar because of the lack of good ass plots.



Author's Response: Thank you for the review.. I completely understand what you are saying and will try to include more detailed plots. ;)

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