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Reviewer: HectorVanDyne Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: March 22 2016 1:43 AM Title: Chapter 31

How can she say he's uninjured, when several chapters described him as badly bruised?  I mean, how is she going to explain the bruises? 

 

I also wonder how exactly she was going to make sure he doesn't seek retribution. Since it's still not a guarantee Lucille will tell her how to shrink people. 



Author's Response:

Hi Hector Michael is bruised and beat up but Mirielle is generalizing when she says uninjured as his condition could certainly have been worse with broken bones and such. Right now she is trying to instill fear to prevent Michael from lashing out IF he is restored.

Reviewer: TomSpeedy Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: March 21 2016 7:42 PM Title: Chapter 31

Confusing sentence here:

"Exactly. Now remember, I think you are going to get violent and try and hurt me or any of these girls, it will be pretty."

"It will be pretty?" What? That makes no sense. I think somewhere there's a typo.

All in all, good chapter. I was hoping that Mirielle gets more time with Michael. Perhaps, now it's Lucie's turn.

I hope Lucie gets some kinky ideas like Mirielle did.

I can't wait for the next chapter!

Author's Response:

Thanks for the head's up. We shall what transpires in the next few chapters.

Reviewer: licktoy Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: March 19 2016 10:11 AM Title: Chapter 30

Very nice chapter. Looking forward how this will continue.



Author's Response:

Thanks for the input. I am torn as to how I want to proceed with this story. The next few chapters could be telling

Reviewer: TomSpeedy Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: March 17 2016 6:14 PM Title: Chapter 30

I know Miss Harwood is in Tom's story. I just think that Mirielle's action suit a hot teacher very well. Either Miss Harwood or Miss Mackenzie in Mo's story. I would love to see them "punish" the guys like this.

This playful abuse is kinda my original idea of how I wanted Lina to be in Tom's story. However, she has established herself as a gentle one. Perhaps, she can change into what I see in Mirielle. Now Mirielle is naughty, and sexy. Not too gentle, not too cruel, and she uses her genitals to play with her man. That's what I want to see more of.

You did a great job with Sophie and Mirielle. Now a hot Milf needs to have this same agenda. Now that's the dream. Mirielle has brought the sexy back to your stories. I hope it spreads to your other ones.

I can't wait for the next chapter!

Author's Response:

I'm glad you approve. I have been wrestling with the notion of sending Madison to the same school as Tom. What might Tess do if she and Madison could trade brothers?

Reviewer: licktoy Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: March 16 2016 3:18 PM Title: Chapter 29

If I remember correctly Michael was looking forward to flirt with Mirielle in the first chapter. Be careful what you wish for :-).

I like Mirielle's dominant attitude when Michael is shyly asking about calling to Lucie and she answers she is going to pee and then uses him for her amusement. Only what matters are her whims.

I am very curious what happens when she pulled him out from her pussy. I guess the dental floss will be very slippery so it will be not easy to release him from the dildo ;-)
Maybe she will just not bother with him and after getting what she wanted she will just ignore him and place him together with the dildo back on the nightstand.

I cannot wait how this continues. Thanks for nice story :-)



Author's Response:

Yep Michael was very hot to trot for the objectified Mirielle thinking of things he would or could do to her. Well... he has now come to realize the difference between wanting and having. Thanks for the review. Stay tuned to the next chapter.

Reviewer: Ancient Relic Signed [Report This]
Date: March 16 2016 5:39 AM Title: Chapter 29

Deep down inside, Michael knows that Mirielle might not help him, but this bit of hope is the only thing between him and complete despair.



Author's Response:

Exactly having a sliver of hope may be more painful that realizing there is no hope. Anyway well see whether or not Mirielle will follow through on her promise. Thank for the review

Reviewer: TomSpeedy Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: March 14 2016 8:21 PM Title: Chapter 29

I love the dental floss idea. It makes him truly helpless as she plunges him inside her.

I'm still waiting for the "tied or sewn to panties" scene. Maybe Miss Harwood will do that instead. I just think that since it was their "last round", Mirielle will decide to tie him up to her so she can remind him who is boss as she takes him to Lucie.

Great stuff these last two chapters. I can't wait for the next chapter!

Author's Response:

Miss Harwood is in the other story but who knows what trials may or may not yet endure. Thanks for the input Tom.

Reviewer: Jay Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: March 14 2016 4:52 PM Title: Chapter 1

I'm a foot fan but love this story. Do you plan to have Michael experience his sister's ass or vagina? And do you plan to have him die due to his sister?

Author's Response:

There was some entrapment earlier with Michael's sister. I'm not sure yet where this story will take us and don't want to spoil anything. Thanks for the review :)

Reviewer: TomSpeedy Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: March 13 2016 6:23 PM Title: Chapter 28

First of all, love the chapter title. That makes me want to read more.

Next, while the scene was good, it's the dialogue that made this scene 10/10. Also, their own respective thoughts, both Mirielle and Micheal.

It's interesting to see Mirielle imagine pleasure while Micheal imagines fear. That's my favorite dynamic.

More action and sexy dialogue in the future please. Now that's what makes these chapters awesome.

I can't wait for the next chapter!

Reviewer: licktoy Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: March 12 2016 12:00 PM Title: Chapter 28

I have just read the whole story and same as Tom's Story this one is also excelent.

This chapter I liked the most.

In summary:
Her psychological ramifications of her complete and utter domination sent over the edge me too :-)



Author's Response:

Agreed

Reviewer: Duggernaut Signed [Report This]
Date: March 06 2016 10:22 AM Title: Chapter 1

@beardless bard my apologies for addressing your review as Brad. I responded off my phone and misread it. 

Reviewer: Beardless Bard Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: March 06 2016 9:28 AM Title: Chapter 1

Sorry: Reposting this review due to some typos.

I've been following your stories for some time now, and I finally decided to make an account and leave a review.

 

I have to say, without a shadow of a doubt, that your writing is amongst the very best on this entire website. I can spend days digging through the muck and only find a handful of truly polished stories that have some thought and direction, and even less that follow the standard conventions of English. You quite clearly have experience with creative writing. You are very descriptive and do a superb job at "showing" instead of "telling". Upon that, my desires in this fetish seem to line up with your writing quite neatly.

 

I can't wait to see where this series (and the others) go. I'm hoping for some more anal insertion at some point soon, especially since I believe it has yet to happen to Michael, and Janine in the other story now seems wary of the practice. You've inspired me to go ahead and start writing my own series when I can manage to find the time.

 

Continue writing on! It is refreshing to see someone who regularly updates their series.

 



Author's Response:

Wow Brad thanks for the incredible review. Though I tend to write for myself it is always gratifying and validating when someone expresses appreciation for the words I put down. I look forward to reading any stories you would choose to share. Thanks again. Hopefully the next chapter will address your desire to see some backdoor action.

Reviewer: Ancient Relic Signed [Report This]
Date: March 06 2016 5:35 AM Title: Chapter 27

Very interesting, especially for a light chapter. Suggestion: Write a chapter where Michael fantasizes about what he'll never get to do to the girls and Mirielle.



Author's Response:

Hmm might be entertaining after Mirielle is finished with Michael for the night. We shall see

Reviewer: TomSpeedy Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: March 05 2016 4:45 PM Title: Chapter 27

These cliffhangers are killing me!

I love the teasing of Mirielle and her way of seducing Michael.

Man, I can't wait for the next chapter!

Author's Response:

Lol the cliffhangers are to keep you guessing and coming back

Reviewer: TomSpeedy Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: February 29 2016 9:17 PM Title: Chapter 26

2nd paragraph, you said "knees a little shaky" twice.

Alright. Business is done. Now it's time for some fun!

Yes! You pulled the Sophie effect from your other story! I love this stuff an I'm glad you included it into this one.

I can't wait for tonight for Mirielle.

Author's Response:

Thanks fixed it

Reviewer: Ancient Relic Signed [Report This]
Date: February 28 2016 6:59 PM Title: Chapter 25

I eagerly wait to find out what Mirielle has planned, and how it'll turn out. A number of possibilities, all of them delicious.



Author's Response:

Mirielle is definitely a little more in tune with her sexual needs than the girls just playing. 

Reviewer: TomSpeedy Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: February 24 2016 7:44 PM Title: Chapter 25

Oh my rielle! (Get it?)

That was awesome! Your last few chapters in like every story is becoming the best that I have ever seen. Not to mention, creative.

Police scene was superb.

Only driving 20 mph over the speed limit on the highway? That's kinda normal for most people around me. Usually it's like 30 mph faster or less if it's not on a highway.

I bet that cop just wanted to pull her over to get a free date. Ha!

I can't wait for the next chapter!

Author's Response:

That's exactly why she was pulled over :) Funny how sometimes seemingly little things can become a life altering event. Might just see this policeman again 

Reviewer: TomSpeedy Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: February 19 2016 9:22 PM Title: Chapter 24

Basically Mirielle just told Madison that you and your friends can't give him in a complicated overdone way.

Half the stuff she said was random and I was wondering where was she going with all these random ideas. Then she finishes it up saying that by all these random ideas I just came up with, Michael is mine for the meantime.

In other words, it's Mirielle time for a while. Yes!

Mirielle said that she knows how to humiliate Michael better than Madison. If that means what she is doing now, then I completely agree. Michael tried so hard to get inside Miriele's panties, and now he is trapped in them. Perfect.

Next time Mirielle has some one on one time with Michael, I hope she just rambles on about all the sexy stuff she will do with him to frighten him. She should tease him too.

I can't wait for the next chapter!

Reviewer: Barrowman Signed [Report This]
Date: February 19 2016 6:11 AM Title: Chapter 24

Mirielle must take causion not to anger the gipsies. ;) We still know so little yet of what each girl in this story is really like. After this long, hard, exciting journey will Michael become a better person and who will be the safest person to stay with.

 

 



Author's Response:

Mirielle better be very careful how she approaches the gypsies or she might find herself thrust into a situation bigger than she expected, :O

Reviewer: Barrowman Signed [Report This]
Date: February 16 2016 1:08 AM Title: Chapter 1

This is good so far. So long as the characters are believable and the story is good.

 



Author's Response:

Thanks Barrowman, I usually try to maintain a feasible sense of reality with some minor allownaces. I hope i can continue to keep you engaged in this tale

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