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Reviewer: Barrowman Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: April 06 2016 11:35 PM Title: Chapter 1

@Tom Speedy. What didn't sit right with me was those words from Lucie and the timing of them and why it was so important for the writer that Mirielle should not hear them, but enough for Michael to scare him and let him think about it, but not enough so he'd knew.
And this sentence of it when Mirielle was gone for a few seconds tipped me off.

He frowned, “I suppose Mirielle told you some of what they did, what she did,” he said, tone embarrassed. It had to be Mirielle, how else would she have known?

And Remeber how Madison knew the name of Lucie's dedanya? The fact that she mentions her by her name Adelina, means she is familiar with them and at least spoke to them OR one of those other girls is a gypsy and the moment Madison told them about what Mirielle wanted. In combination with what Lucie said, it became a VERY plausible possibility.

I will re-read the chapters from beginning to the point we see the last of Madison and those girls.
Checking for clues if plans were hatched after Mirielle left with Michael or if this was planned well in advanced and part of the plan was to lure Mirielle in to this. It seems after Mirielle left.

Again, so long the characters, story and development are believable, it will be worth it. As long as it is enjoyable and with a happy end.
I can't judge Madison yet. We don't know what happened in detail with Madison between age 10 and 17. But I also have a feeling that I'm not going to like Madison in the end. We now have 2 missing persons and all people involved will eventually get in a lot of trouble. A line is crossed now and the point of no return has begun.

Reviewer: TomSpeedy Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: April 06 2016 5:56 PM Title: Chapter 36

Man, this is just like Barrowman's prediction about one of the little girls telling Lucie about this whole thing. Especially since Madison had something to do with it.

I never liked Madison. Why she gotta be back? I guess some people like her or there's something special about her that I don't know. Also, did Lucie shrink Mirielle just because Mirielle wanted power?

I prefer a giantess Mirelle and a shrunken Madison. Michael worst fear is back. Giant sister!

I can't wait for the next chapter! (Wondering if Mo's story can get an update.)

Reviewer: Barrowman Signed [Report This]
Date: April 03 2016 8:32 AM Title: Chapter 1

@TomSpeedy. No problem, those thoughts you have are interesting. And what you say could also be the case if the writer chose that scenario.

But look at this piece of text from chapter 34. Mindreading would explain this. But I put my original guess back again after this piece of text. And that explanation/possibility is even much simpeler than the mindreading one.

“I’ll get it,” Mirielle volunteered, getting to her feet.

Lucie kept her dusky eyes on Michael, “So, how did you enjoy yourself in the hands of your sister and her friends?” she asked, an amused smile playing at the corner of her mouth.

He frowned, “I suppose Mirielle told you some of what they did, what she did,” he said, tone embarrassed. It had to be Mirielle, how else would she have known?

“And what have you learned during your little adventures?” she asked.

“What it’s like to be small and powerless,” he replied.

Mirielle reappeared, bag in hand.

Maybe it's nothing, but the way this got delivered by the writer gives me the feeling that strange acting Lucie knew this already before Mirielle and Michael gave their information to her. The possibility exist that Adelina, the name of Lucie's dedanya(grandma), got tipped off by someone about Mirielle's plan.

Reviewer: TomSpeedy Signed [Report This]
Date: April 03 2016 2:37 AM Title: Chapter 35

Well, I think Lucie is a witch or priestess that can read minds. She knows what the girls and Mirielle did because she sensed it. Then she sensed Michael's humiliation through his memory.

(I'm totally making this up, just becuase I think this situation is gonna be something simple to explain and won't be some complicated back story.)

Or Deandya shrunk herself to sit in Lucie's ear and tell her what to do. That could explain the strange behavior.

(Yeah, now I'm just saying random explanations. Haha!)

Reviewer: Barrowman Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: April 03 2016 1:26 AM Title: Chapter 1

@Duggernaut. I have deleted my conclusion/guess out of my previous review not the spoil the story for others. But I hope many readers see some of these clues and hints in the story. It gives a far more satisfying read that way.
Thanks for the reaction.
I gave my opinion about the situation to Tom Speedy, but the moment I read my own review I got suspicious. The conclusion about how the Gypsy clan would react to Lucie's ideas were spot on, but something didn't fully add up. Then I went to re-read the chapters again and all the conversations between Mirielle and Lucie.
Than I went the read previous chapters again, because of something I thought I read, but wasn't 100% sure anymore. Than I found that clue and my conclusion/guess became a very plausible possibility.
You write very clever.
Of course there could be a simpeler explanation, but that would be less exciting and less unlikely and would make Lucie or whoever she is more powerful without very few weaknesses and less like a human being that is skilled in the art of curses. That would be boring.

Reviewer: Barrowman Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: April 02 2016 10:57 PM Title: Chapter 1

Yes, this seems like a very interesting development. Michael still small and Mirielle small now.

 

I know Mirielle gave some hints to Lucie that some girls did something to him in chapter 32.
“Now, before we explore restoring him, he has been, let’s say, handled by some young ladies in some very intimate ways,” Mirielle stated.

 

In chapter 33 Michael says to Lucie.
“Absolutely, nothing more I swear,” he said, turning to look at Mirielle, “I even promised her I would be nice to my sister and her friends, no hard feelings. Please all I want is to be myself again,” he begged.

 

But still after that, In chapter 34 this piece of conversation between Michael and Lucie feels suspicious.

“I’ll get it,” Mirielle volunteered, getting to her feet.

Lucie kept her dusky eyes on Michael, “So, how did you enjoy yourself in the hands of your sister and her friends?” she asked, an amused smile playing at the corner of her mouth.

He frowned, “I suppose Mirielle told you some of what they did, what she did,” he said, tone embarrassed. It had to be Mirielle, how else would she have known?

“And what have you learned during your little adventures?” she asked.

“What it’s like to be small and powerless,” he replied.

Mirielle reappeared, bag in hand.


Reviewer: TomSpeedy Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: April 02 2016 2:13 PM Title: Chapter 35

So Mirielle shrunk and Michael is ....still shrunk. Lol! Then what was Michael talking about when he was shouting "It's happening, it's happening" like its the apocalypse or something?

Loving the comeback by Mirielle, "you were chasing that ass for 2 years". Haha!

Michael was so happy for like 2 minutes, then he felt sad. He wanted to rape her so bad, but then after thinking, he realized what's going on. Clearly his dick thought first instead of his head.

Mirielle is not even bothered that she is the same size as Micheal. I was expecting some fear in her eyes but she handled him very well. I bet she probably can rape Michael right now and he can't stop her.

Michael is like this dumbass brute who gets high off power and whines when he doesn't have it. He was cocky and greedy in the beginning of the story, then he was sad when he was shrunk, then he got happy and confident seeing Mirielle small, and then he lost it when he noticed he was small. I mean he just wants to fuck everyone and wants to be big.

I can picture a cartoon with Michael running toward Mirielle with his tongue hanging out and his dick erect and pointing at Mirielle. Then she looks at him in disgust and just extends her and pushes Michael down. Michael gets back up to get to Mirielle, but once again Mirielle pushes him down. Then Michael dodges her arm this time, but then Mirielle just kicks him in the balls and Michael falls down and cries. Mirielle rolls her eyes and walks away.

That cartoon is basically how I interpreted this chapter, and it does seem pretty funny.

I can't wait for the next chapter!

Reviewer: Barrowman Signed [Report This]
Date: April 01 2016 11:49 PM Title: Chapter 1

@Ancient Relic. I know, but with that plot device you can write any out of character behaviour for a person and than say, "It's because of the curse".
But I'm still curious where this story is going.



Author's Response:

Like the ever popular dream sequence

Reviewer: Ancient Relic Signed [Report This]
Date: April 01 2016 6:18 PM Title: Chapter 32

@Barrowman:

I find Lucy totally out of character in the last 2 chapters. Her behaviour is not of the Lucy in the beginning.

I figured it was the result of this:

Lucie nodded, “I’m not surprised. There is something in the curse that seem to magnify the recipient’s vulnerabilities, which can have unusual effects on others,” she explained, grinning at the strawberry blonde.



Author's Response:

The curse makes Michael seem more vulnerable, which in turn may fuel the inclinations of the possessor to perhaps get frisky with him, like a miniature highly concentrated little aphrodisiac.

Reviewer: TomSpeedy Signed [Report This]
Date: April 01 2016 11:23 AM Title: Chapter 1

@Barrowman,

Well, you got me there. These characters are much more complex than I thought.

Also, I think you are on to something with Lucie. I'm not sold that Lucie is actually the Daenya, but I do agree that she has changed and seems to much more confident and powerful than when we last saw her.

Anything can happen next chapter, but one thing we know is that Lucie is running the show. Let's hope it doesn't disappoint. :)

Author's Response:

Maybe  :)

Reviewer: Barrowman Signed [Report This]
Date: March 31 2016 11:56 PM Title: Chapter 1

@TomSpeedy. Please no brainless one dimensional characters and huge plot holes. ;) Expecting that a member of that clan would fully oblige Mirielle with that request and not have alarmbells go off in their heads by such a request would be very unrealistic, they would have to be incredibly stupid. Those Gypsies wouldn't want their power and secrets to come in the hands of outsiders with a totally different mindset. And the fact that they see her on the side of Michael or comes from the same world, would mean they totally don't trust the whole situation.
And this can't be Lucy. In the beginning we can clearly see that Lucy's character is friendly, protective, polite and has no resentment to even Michael, but only feels disappointed that she could not save him from that fate. And if Michael in that state of bad attitude and form doesn't antagonize Lucy, than this humble defeated form begging wouldn't do that at all. The words and tone she used sound more like something the grandmother would be motivated to use in this kind of situation. The writer definitely hints that something isn't right about Lucy.



Author's Response:

The representation does seem VERY different compared to the Lucie we met in the early chapters.

Reviewer: TomSpeedy Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: March 31 2016 6:50 PM Title: Chapter 34

Wtf just happened?

It seems like Lucie did something bad to Mirielle and we get the feeling she shrunk, but there's no way that can happen. I mean, what? Shrinking woman? No, this story will be messed up.

So let me get this straight. Lucie is asking for Michael's and Mirielle's hair. They are both agreeing for this change. U mean Mirielle WANTS Micheal to be big? Did she just agree to that? Why?

Why did Mirielle give her hair? What was the reason for that?

I feel like I need to look up some detailed explanation of what happened in this chapter because this is just random.

So Michael also agreed to be a ring? I know they were talking about turning into objects before, but I didn't think they would actually do it. Also, why would Mirielle let Michael become a ring? This is like Lucie possessed Mirielle for a minute.

I doubt Mirielle shrunk. That's just weird. Unless...... Unless Lucie feels so sorry for Micheal that she restored him, shrunk Mirielle and is going to let Michael abuse Mirielle. That could be true, but I don't like it one bit.

I hope this sensation Mirielle has is just Duggernaut's tricks for us to suspect random stuff.

Man, I hope the story at least remains sexy. I mean, this chapter just feels like the story is about to collapse. Of course, nothing happened yet, but it doesn't sound pleasant.

I can't wait for the next chapter!

Reviewer: Barrowman Signed [Report This]
Date: March 31 2016 6:31 PM Title: Chapter 1

I find Lucy totally out of character in the last 2 chapters. Her behaviour is not of the Lucy in the beginning. That Lucy tried her best to prevent the curse from happening, even to a guy like Michael. A totally different personality. The way she speaks is so different, more like her dedanya.
That's what I would have said about chapter 33, but with these hints, this has to be dedanya.
But I like that its story driven chapters are back again. As long as the story is interesting and the characters and their development are believable, than its good. Like those subtle hints and awkward situations for everyone.
I'm captivated again.



Author's Response:

Some readers are sometimes too clever...

Reviewer: Ancient Relic Signed [Report This]
Date: March 31 2016 6:05 PM Title: Chapter 34

Did Lucie just outscheme Mirielle? Is Mirielle now as helpless as Michael, with Lucie in control? Did Duggernaut just shrink a woman for the first time? This screws things up nicely.

Reviewer: Ancient Relic Signed [Report This]
Date: March 29 2016 5:33 PM Title: Chapter 33

If they keep screwing with Michael this way, eventually he's going to completely break.

Reviewer: licktoy Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: March 29 2016 8:47 AM Title: Chapter 33

I like playful dominant attitude of Lucie. I am really curious how she and Mirielle are going to continue with Michale. It looks both girls are going to have a lot of fun teaching Michael how to respect women :-)

Can't wait for the next chapter.

 

Reviewer: TomSpeedy Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: March 28 2016 8:27 PM Title: Chapter 33

He said it! Small it is!

Time for Lucie to have some fun.

I'm with Mirielle. I have no idea what Lucie is planning, but it seems exciting to not know what is going to happen.

I can't wait for the next chapter!

Reviewer: licktoy Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: March 27 2016 12:26 AM Title: Chapter 32

I am very curious how those 'unusual effects on others' mentioned by Lucie will work on Lucie itself ;-) Especially when gypsies are so temperament nation.

Cannot wait for the next chapter.



Author's Response:

Indeed, the term 'Gypped' stems from the perception they are very adept at bartering and getting the upper hand in negotiations.

Reviewer: TomSpeedy Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: March 24 2016 5:46 PM Title: Chapter 32

In other words, he can't be restored. Well, at least Michael can have a threesome with Mirielle and Lucie. Haha.

I don't like this object stuff talk. Turning Michael into an object? Of course, if I had to choose, it would be a vibrating marble so he can sent deep down into everyone's vaginas. Or at least Mirielle's Mr. Reliable. Still, I prefer him to stay like a 3 inch human that attracts females.

I hope Lucie gets to play with Michael too.

If not, I hope Mirielle keeps him. I just hope he doesn't return to those bratty girls of Madison's friends. Mirielle and Lucie are awesome.

I can't wait for the next chapter!

Reviewer: licktoy Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: March 22 2016 3:28 PM Title: Chapter 31

Mirielle is a very smart woman. She knows Michael is an arrogant boy. His ego is hurt. If he is restored to his normal size she would not be able to prevent him to revenge or cause serious problems. Therefore there is no point she is going to help him. I like how she manipulates him by giving him a hope in order to submit her will.

I am very curious how she will interact with Lucie. Maybe they could dominate Michael together to teach him to be more respectful. ;-) Except using him for sex they also could start to train him to obedient e.g. by giving him various ridiculous (humiliating) tasks for their amusement and punishing him if he hesitates to obey --- to break his big ego.

Also in some previous chapter Mirielle thought about having Michael's father in her ass so that his head would stick out. Maybe she could try it first with Michael. Having him there his head out. Completely ignoring his conditions - taking shower, going to pee etc.

I like the term 'ass candy'.

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