Date: December 07 2015 2:10 PM Title: Accelerated Agenda
DARN! Story got violent!!! Makes me wonder, since you associate, allbeit slightly, to Diana, do you fantasize about swallowing shrunken women?
I love the sock lint from between Diana's toes. I have to admit, being a connoisseur of women's feet I was hoping Andrea would be able to keep it down. "YUMMY SCRUMPTIOUS!"
It's great that Anne is still trapped in the glass. Nice touch leaving her in there.
Since Diana did in fact swallow Andrea alive, are we going to read any Diana dumping out Andrea in the toilet action. Perhaps into a small glass jar and then sealed up and put on display for the other girls to gasp at in horror of their own fates.
I prefer not to make to many suggestions to you, since I like reading what you have in mind all of your own fancy. Great Story!
Author's Response:
. . . Yeah. Things are building up to the more vicious parts, and if the ending goes the way I originally planned (ie, no requests that impact the plot) we're gonna be short a few girls really soon. Also, I don't relate slightly to Diana: I relate a LOT to Diana. She's pretty much tit-for-tat who I was at 17, down to her height. And yes, I'd love to gulp down a hot woman just as much as I'd want to go down her throat.
Well, it's canon that the perfume makes you unable to keep anything down, period. Even if it's something absolutely delicious and nutritious, the perfume will keep you from being able to hold it down while you're under its effects.
Well, she hasn't been let out yet, so obviously she'd still be in there.
Diana's actually only being violent on Val's orders, and in fact only came up with the footrub from the twins and the food torture thing on her own. Everything else was on request from Val, in order to appease her crush. Before you ask, Val probably wouldn't ask Diana to do that, because it's a reminder that Diana could do it to her, too.
Why, thank you for your review, and I hope you still like later.
[Report This]Date: December 07 2015 7:35 AM Title: Accelerated Agenda
Well, I would prefer Natalie survives. I don't think Val is too angry at her and she already suffers from not being able to talk.
The rest of this is merely opinion based. I can't wait to read more and want to see where your own creativity takes this story. This is just what I thought up could happen.
1) I think Val should die either by refusing to do something actually sexual with Diana and then Diana realizes she isn't liked back at all, or the other girls catch on to what Val is doing and "push" her off the table.
2) you should split the (twins?) deaths apart, so one dies and the other is like a broken toy without their other half.
Again, I can't wait to read more and see what turns this story takes. Keep up the amazing work!
Author's Response:
*Natasha
Sorry, had to. Anyway, about the rest of it:
Natasha is escaping Val's ire for the moment for exactly that reason. Given how mad with power she's getting though, it's only a matter of time before she starts turning to the girls who haven't done anything wrong yet. Whether she's stopped before, at, or after that point remains to be seen, if she's even stopped at all . . .
You'll be getting a glimpse of what's been going on behind the scenes with Val pretty soon, actually, and I'm debating how much of Sunday I should skip over to get to that. Decisions, decisions . . .
Yeah, Lynn and Becky are twins. Regarding the deaths of one or both of them . . . it's a secret!
Date: December 06 2015 2:46 PM Title: Accelerated Agenda
If it's not any trouble to request something, I'd like Natasha to get a piece of paper and chunk of pencil lead at some point. I'd also appreciate if the bichiest girl left out of all of them ended up being forced into a life of sex slavery to Diana.
If you could make a list of the remaining girls, 1 being "following the crowd out of fear" and 5 being "sadistic megabitch" that'd be great.
Author's Response:
No problem at all, actually.
Yeah, I've been slacking on Natasha's POV, precisely because I'm trying to figure out how best to represent her.
Scaling down--
Anne: 5 (directed most of everyone else's raw bitchiness at Diana, and had enough of her own to power fifty alpha bitches)
Penny: 5 (actual sadist, straight-up enjoys fucking with people)
Val: 5 (safe for now because of Diana's crush on her, but has a mean streak a mile wide, and is extremely maniuplative to boot)
Rei: 4 (surprisingly kinda mean in general, but doesn't really care who she's being mean to)
Kayla: 3 (isn't really doing this for kicks- she's actually kinda nice, outside her rampant homophobia)
Tamara: 3 (going along with this to fit in, plus it's easy and cathartic)
Lynn: 2 (legitimately believes what Anne tells her, but only acts on it because it's Anne telling her to do it- she hero-worships the more popular girl)
Natasha: 2 (would rather be the bully than the girl getting picked on, and sticks with Anne for safety and popularity)
Becky: 1 (does whatever her sister is doing, and is scared of Anne)
Paris: 1 (has moral convictions, but is completely terrified of getting Anne angry, and is in fact the most likely person to survive barring Val if Diana grows a conscience quick)
Date: December 06 2015 6:01 AM Title: Accelerated Agenda
I hope what Diane wants to hear is all the girls having an orgy together (at least, that's what I'd want to hear, heh...) But why are you so gung ho about killing all of them? I can gurantee you that Andrea never regretted what she did. You know what might be fun is to take one or more of the girls, put them in solitary for a week, and see how that works out for their humility. An added bonus would be an offhand remark that while they were locked up, everyone else was killed.
Author's Response:
I'm only so set on it because that was the original plan.
I'm getting a lot of "maybe" and "it'd be cool if", but I'm not deviating from the plan unless I get an honest-to-goodness request, and . . . I only have two of those. Both of which just changed the way the espective victims died.
Thanks for the review, though, and that is a cool idea.