Reviewer: SpookyTaco Signed [Report This]
Date: September 28 2015 5:15 PM Title: Romantic Dinner

Wow, two chapters at once! I almost didn't notice this second chapter. I recommend spreading this out more next time. :)

This was a great chapter tho! We got to see Ash and Luna 'interact' after her full ascension and while it went as expected, in some ways, that's a good thing.

You do a good job of portraying Luna's enhanced intellect. Let's hope her brilliance doesn't become more of a burden than a boon.

You mentioned at one point that she pulled his head into her stomach, just under her breasts. Would he be that tall? I think he's only 5'9. So he'd perhaps reacher her lower abdomen, unless she was coming up the stairs or something.

Author's Response:

Good catch on the height mistake. I fixed it. 

I considered posting the update as a single chapter, but it makes more sense as two.