Reviewer: TomSpeedy Signed [Report This]
Date: September 05 2015 3:57 PM Title: Chapter 2

Yes! A character with the name "Tom" again! I wonder what ride I will be on in this story.

Kimber is the super sexy girl that shrunk Len. Just remember that. And she did it by touch. I was getting nervous when she touched Morriss's cheek, like "is he going to shrink?" I guess not.

However, I bet Morris did have to change his underwear after that, not because he came into it, but probably because he pissed his pants after that. He thought he was going to shrink too! I bet he was scared. And my character, Tom, was in awe of the whole spectacle. Just watching my friend got touched by Kimber oblivious to Morris's fear.

Remember how a rumor spread of that one girl who gave a bj to Len? Well, I think Morris about to start a new rumor about Kimber shrinking people and soon he will be their next target.

For the next chapter, we know my boy Tom will not believe a word that Morris says. First, he believes that Morris's mental state has changed when he died his thing under the bleachers and also is still mesmerized from Kimber's presence just now. We know Morris has to get it off his chest, but I don't think now is the best time to tell Tom.

If Morris really wanted to convince Tom, then he should contact his other friend Tom who is sleeping in Lina's panties. :)

Or Morris and Tom should check out the site giantessworld and find this story and look at chapter 1 for proof. Lol. Does that make sense?

Well, either way, I don't think Tom will believe Morris next chapter. Then Morris will try to spy on the girls to check if it wasn't the effects of his drug thing. Then Morris sees it again, but this time(that's right) he gets caught. Yep, I think that's when Morris will shrink and soon Tom afterward.

Tom shrinking in another story? Hmmm. And he could be captured by a hot teen? Hmm. This sounds familiar. I hope one of their moms gets Tom, but if not, that's ok. We already have a Tom/MILF relationship in another story. This time, it's about Morris.

I can't wait for the next chapter!

Author's Response:

Figured you'd approve of the inclusion of another Tom. In Morris’s mind what real and what's imagined are clouded by his altered state.

Reviewer: DARK WRITTER Signed [Report This]
Date: September 05 2015 11:18 AM Title: Chapter 2

What a cliff hanger; but nice story and character development.  One has to wonder, where did the Graces acquire such power and why did Mrs. Pembry not ask Morris WHY he was late {does she know something just happened, sorta teacher - disciple psychic connection}?

Hmmm, psychic connection, imagine someone(s) lighting up only to channel Len in Susannah's stomach throughout the slow digestion process, feeling the experience from Len's mind, even hearing Susannah giggle and talk going about her day. Imagining waking in your own bed the next moring having "dreamt" that the entire time. {Not being sure how you got to your own bed making you doubt it really happened}

Does Len even get digested? Digested or not, does Len die in the process? Does Len's body, or at least his consciousness even come out, or remain in Susannah's bowels.  

It would be a heck of a high if everytime Morris and Tom light up they are channeled to experience Len's existance; or if they exist the perspective of another of the Graces' shrunken - even transformed people.

You're story is full of possibilities.  Great job in coming up with such a wonderful scenario. 

Author's Response:

Thanks for the wealth of input. I think chapter 4 may include some dream sequencing as per some of your suggestions I haven't figured out all the details yet. :)