[Report This]Date: October 17 2015 11:19 AM Title: Chapter Eleven
This story is amazing so far. I haven't been reading and reviewing lately. But I'm enjoying your story alot with the time that I have. You have always been one of my favorite writers.
Author's Response:
Thank you for your kind words. I noticed I am in your favourites list. It's so heartwarming to see comments like yours. Hopefully you'll have the time to read the upcoming chapters.
Date: October 08 2015 6:59 PM Title: Chapter Eleven
I am soooooo sorry!!!
I was really caught up with offline life, but I came back on today and saw this on the Most Recent page, so naturally I jumped in.
I like the interaction between Persophone and Sidney, and I hate the cliffhanger, but I'm striving for more.
Author's Response:
With all the talk of mass shootings recently, I was worried. Welcome back. Hopefully you enjoyed the previous chapters just as much. The goes on regardless of you being there to see it or not.
[Report This]Date: October 08 2015 4:34 PM Title: Chapter Eleven
I'm glad you took what I said to heart, you didn't really need to change anything and the story would have been fine but now that you've introduced elements of actual danger for Sidney to overcome, it'll make his triumps that much more impactful! And as I said, with any luck, he'll be able to prove his skills!
I also want to say that I really dug that moment of self reflection that Sidney had on his way over. So he really DID think Persophone might be too dangerous to keep alive. Like he pondered, Persophone is a walking contradiction, and probably the most complex character in this entire story to be honest. Nyx and Eris are more typical, "I'm bigger are better than you puny humans so obey or else", type characters.
Persophone has elements of that in her character but like Althea said, she seems to want more out of her life than just subjugating humans and ruling with an iron fist. But at the same time she eats humans by the dozens and even has threatened to destroy an entire base of humans should they defy her in the slightest. I hope she gets some character development, I really think she's the most interesting character and probably the character most likely to evolve as the story progresses.
Great chapter, I really did like this one! The cliffhanger I could have done without but it's a necessary evil when writting a story chapter by chapter. I'm looking forward to the next one!
Author's Response:
This chapter was going to happen eventually regarldess. I have notes for all future chapters written now. I think Persephone has no choice but to eat humans given the circumstances. She would need to find a planet with an atmosphere suitable for growing things to live any other way. When you say chararacter development, do you mean her becoming more benevolent?