Hey, just wanted to comment on the fact that this story has gone far past the scope of the description, as the party has long since been forgetten.  Not a huge problem or anything, you may just want to update it.  Been reading since this story being about 5 chapters, and I've all but forgotten about the party at the beginning, and the description makes it seems as though the story will take place mostly at a girls only party, not the adventure it has become.  Great story though, and congrats on chapter 100 from a first-time commenter.

My point precisely, Hec, How is Lina going to keep Elle from instituting a police manhunt after a week of no word from Tom? Especially, if she wants to find out what Tess meant by "small?" Short of Lina getting her hands on Grandpa Wentworth's shrink ray, there's no feasible way to keep Elle a virtual prisoner in the Lindholm residence. Ergo; abduction of Elle en route to same

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Interesting discussion, tee hee

I'm so happy Raphaella is finally getting involved. I guess Lina underestimated her love for her son. 

Also, it seems like she'll learn about Tom's condition sooner than Lina wanted.

Here it is. The legendary chapter 100!

What I was impressed about was the length of this chapter. Hoping to see longer chapters in the future. I don't expect it, but I would be glad to see that.

Yeah. You are right. I was one of those people expecting some super sexy showdown but it turns out that it was actually a "who gets Tom" showdown.

Wow, this chapter made me agree with licktoy's review. Jessica does seem childish. It's like she found that toy that she never wants to let go. (Insert "Let it go" song.)

I didn't expect Jessica to be that desperate to hold Tom. She seems almost crazy. At first, she was asking for permission to touch him, then all of a sudden, bam! She grabs him with no regard for Tom's life!

I thought you are going to describe Jessica beautifully but instead you downplayed her by instead complimenting Janine as she stands next to Jessica. Was this to make us like Janine again? If yes, it worked. Despite Jessica's age, she lacks the maturity that her younger sister has.

So Tom is airborne falling to the ground. The next desperate person is Janine so I imagine that she will catch him. Then Cassidy sees Tom in Janine's hand and is worried that Janine may take Tom away. Then, to Cassidy's surprise, Janine hands back Tom to Cassidy. I'm guessing Jessica will be too scared to do anything realizing that she almost killed Tom. Might even apologize a bunch of times. Expecting a lot of sorrys.

Are Donatella and Raphella supposed to be based of the ninja turtles? Lol, I can't believe I never noticed that before.

Seriously Lina? You are trying to separate a mother to her son. Not as easy as you thought, huh? And that story was so bizarre anyway. Btw, I miss the Lina that was one step ahead of everyone.

Now Tom's mom is coming soon. Oh boy. And Tess, you got some explaining to do. Also, Tess, just say that "small" was a typo. Just take that word out and it's a normal text. No biggie. Yet she screws up by not answering. Just txt her now Tess, says its a typo! It's not too late!

Speaking of typos. I thought "je nes sais quoi" was a typo. I have never, ever heard that word (or phrase?) in my life. Had to look it up to understand it.

Well, deep chapter. I can't wait for the next one!