Date: March 10 2017 8:30 PM Title: Tom
Wait, what?
Tom is actually being considerate? Of Tess' feelings? Wow dude! Good on ya!
But dude, there's something really wrong with you if you take one nanosecond thinking about Janine's well being. Consider her reaction during the accident the definition of and the best way to end your relationship: "her goodbye piss."
Really dude, grow some self respect.
[Report This]Date: January 23 2016 3:56 AM Title: Tom
Very good!
Cassie should change his mind and stay with tone. May punish him in some way.
Author's Response:
Thanks for the review who knows what Cassidy may or may not have in store for Tom.
[Report This]Date: January 20 2016 9:57 PM Title: Tom
Dear Tom: you also thought--in your ch. 51 review--that there wouldn't be any car crash, at all. ;-)
[Report This]Date: January 20 2016 7:32 PM Title: Tom
Cassidy seems super nice. She is even nicer than Lina which I could now believe thanks to Lina getting deceptive lady chapter.
This chapter felt just like Michael's story. The fact that Tom asked Cassidy to call Tess reminded me of the scene where Michael wanted Madison to call Lucie. Only difference is that Cassidy is nice enough to grant Tom's wish.
One thing that felt off. Tom's message didn't include the car crash. It's almost like he knows that Tess is aware of the crash. We, the readers are aware of it, but Tom has no idea that Tess knows about it.
When Cassidy asked Tom about Janine's underpants, I was anxious to hear Tom describe his whole experience. It could give Cassidy some fun ideas becuase I encourage the idea of Tom having fun with Cassidy. However, I think this gentleness will make Cassidy the new Lina, and Lina will become more agressive and controlling.
Nurse angle....Yes! We could have some nurse/patient roleplay with Cassidy taking care of Tom by "keeping him safe" by putting him in some comfy tight places. I like Tom's thoughts about this situation.
The phone buzzed, she swiped the screen, then she frowned. She frowned not when she immediately looks at her phone, but only after she swipes her phone. Perhaps she got hacked, and she might punish Tom. Probably not, but I think Lina had something to do with this cliffhanger.
Good stuff, I can't wait for the next chapter!
Date: January 20 2016 7:15 PM Title: Tom
@Carycomic,
I don't even know my siblings' phone numbers either becuase I just click on their names when I call them. I don't think the accident had anything to do with it. He probably just put in the number a long time ago and now Tom just clicks on the Tess button now.
Author's Response:
Lol it's funny the reason I presented it this way was because I couldn't remember my brother's number
[Report This]Date: January 20 2016 6:03 PM Title: Tom
Well, so far/so good!
Cassie really does seem nice and, therefore, a credit to her calling. Which, in turn, makes me all the more eager for a more detailed description of her. As, thus far, all any of us know for certain about her appearance is that she's pretty!*
As to Tom's memory of his sister's cellphone number being a little fuzzy? All too plausible after a car accident. So, I give you two thumbs' up for that bit of realism. But, that cliff-hanging frown has me worried. Did Cassie's caller ID register the name of whatever private detective agency Janine's flunky is using? Or was it something even more sinister?
You may touch-down dance in the knowledge that you've well and truly stumped me, as to what comes next.
*Of course, given that she's an ER nurse, it stands to reason that her hair would quite naturally be camouflaged by either her blue surgical cap, or the more conventional white one.
Author's Response:
The caller ID did indeed register some information Cassie was not expecting. I consider it a compliment that there enough potentialities that the story has not become too predictable, though I will hold off on the Ickey Shuffle for now.