[Report This]Date: March 09 2017 10:08 PM Title: Lazarus
Chapter 50, Lazarus.
Okay, I like Tom enough that it's not worth it to see the bitch choke...but only barely...and only because it would hurt Tess.
So there.
Actually it's good to see Tom actively trying to escape. Making him a more active character really adds to the story.
[Report This]Date: December 19 2015 1:56 PM Title: Lazarus
excellent!
Tom should die ingested and digested by someone, showing every part of digestion.
Author's Response:
Janine thought about it, and in the end, maybe thats the way he'll go, not sure yet, this story is still unfolding for me as well.
[Report This]Date: December 17 2015 7:58 PM Title: Lazarus
Awesome, I figured she swalowed him but did not know what reaction she would have, panic or calm and casual and I must say I love how she reacted!
The amount of time Tom spent in her stomach was minscule, way to short to cause any damage, it takes 45 minutes for stomach acids to reach the ph level necessary to start breaking down food.
I suspect Lina will now be suspicious about Janines behavior so it wasnt a total victory for Janine, she will need to be very careful going forward.
One thing she shouldnt have to worry about anymore is Tom acting out, I think her swallowing him triggered an even darker side to Janine, she is the true badass here.
Well done, Duggernaut!
Author's Response:
Thanks Maximus, I think this chapter has certainly taken the smirk off Tom's face and redefined his situation. Janine's swallowing of him did open her mind to new possibilities.
[Report This]Date: December 17 2015 12:13 AM Title: Lazarus
Whaaaat? He was in her esophagus and then her stomach for the entire time when she went to the bathroom?
She had time to respond to Lina, show her a hand full of spit, and go "hastily" to the bathroom all while Tom is inside her?
Seems a bit superficial. Either Tom immediately went into her stomach and something acidic may have affected him. It wouldn't dissolve him right away, but he should have at least a somewhat major injury. Or, he puts up a struggle in her esophagus that she chokes up and couldn't even speak to her mother. Seemed like he went straight down immediately. And in that case, it's like a good 15 seconds in her stomach which is a lot.
Sure, I guess I'm a bit after these minor details, but I envisioned a totally different scenario. I thought that Janine would've been forced to vomit him up right there by the front door and have no time to go to that bathroom to cough him up. By looking at the last chapter, it seemed like Janine would either reveal Tom in her mouth, or keep him in her stomach for good. I found this vomiting him up later in the bathroom sequence some bs.
Also, remember when Tom pleasured Lina to a point where she was moaning in front of Janine? Well, couldn't Tom do that again right before they hugged? I feel like he could've made Janine expose her captive by some stimulation on his part.
Well, it was still an entertaining chapter no doubt. Janine showing no signs of a weakness and Tom is running out of options.
I can't wait for the next chapter!
[Report This]Date: December 16 2015 8:26 PM Title: Lazarus
Well I can safely say that Janine is the most dangerous girl that Tom has encountered so far. She's a complete sociopath, devoid of any empathy or care for anyone else but herself and her own fun...Dangerous to the nth degree, Tom would be better off with anyone else at this point! I'm still wondering how this guy is sane after all he's been through!
Author's Response:
Tom is pretty resilient, but this latest round has certainly make him take the situation more seriously.
[Report This]Date: December 16 2015 7:31 PM Title: Lazarus
As my parents (the Foxwoods gambling addicts) might say: "Long shots almost never pay off. And this was definitely WAY outside the 'almost' category."
[Report This]Date: December 16 2015 7:09 PM Title: Lazarus
My goodness, Tom is really on thin ice now. He better focus on pleasing Janine to the best of his ability for the immediate future. The dark turn this story has taken is great, very well written. You can feel Tom's fear right now.