Date: March 07 2017 7:35 AM Title: Back at the School
Okay,
This sort of feels like a sitcom called "my idiot shrunken brother"
A sit com that would win an emmy, the dialogue is chrisp and witty.
I almost feel sorry for Janine, sitting all alone. I wonder what she'll be really like.
Tess seems like she's the smart one, but I think she needs to learn how to say no and mean it, because Tom ....he's gonna get into trouble.
Peace
Date: September 03 2015 11:51 PM Title: Back at the School
seeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeex
[Report This]Date: July 25 2015 7:20 AM Title: Back at the School
Very good!
Continues...
Author's Response:
Thank your for the kind words and for taking the time to share them with me. :)
[Report This]Date: July 24 2015 5:53 PM Title: Back at the School
P.S.---I hope Samira turns out to practice belly dancing in her spare time.
Author's Response:
Mmm, might be interesting, Dance of the Seven Veils and all.
[Report This]Date: July 24 2015 5:51 PM Title: Back at the School
Actually, if you believe those Japanese anime series, it's not gnomes who steal teenage girls' underpants. It's dirty little old men!
Well, that's what I've heard. I don't watch anime, myself. ;-D
Author's Response:
https://www.youtube.com/results?search_query=underpants+gnomes+song
Not much into anime myself, my reference was South Park - don't know if the address above will link or not.
[Report This]Date: July 23 2015 9:21 PM Title: Back at the School
Hmm. This story has a greater number of reviewers compared to your other stories. Maybe it's becuase it's a fresh topic. I don't know, but I like it. Interesting to see what others think of it.
Back to chapter 5.
I'm amazed at how Tom kept his composure after that compact ride in her sister's shirt. He was all giddy. I thought he would be grumpy.
A phone keeps you busy for some time but not forever. Tom got so bored, he went for Sam's underwear. Haha. Perhaps he has been thinking of girls too much; especially Janine.
Speaking of girls, I can't wait for that all girls party coming up! And a dozen girls!??! Wow! That should be fun. There's a lot of room for error if Tess makes a mistake there.
When Tess said "crazy stupid idea", I thought of the movie "Crazy Stupid Love" and in this story, that love is quite crazy and could be seen as stupid. I, however, think it's a brilliant idea to smuggle him in there.
What I wonder is if Tom is gonna jump off Tess right once they enter Janine's house, or if Tess will let Tom go in a safe place? Either way seems like a good idea, becuase there will be plenty of time to have fun, as well as find Janine.
If Tom wants to spend time alone with Janine, he has to wait for everyone to leave the party including Tess.
The question now is, will Tess allow Tom to stay in Janine's house? I hope so, becuase I think this is his only opportunity to get into her house.
Great transition from the plane to Tess's place and now to the party all in one chapter. Now the real fun begins!
I can't wait for the next chapter!
Author's Response:
Hey Tom, get ready because it's about to get interesting, :)
Date: July 23 2015 7:37 PM Title: Back at the School
i really like the story so far, please keep it coming, id like to see more of the interaction with tess and tom, i think it would be cool for tom to mistakingly take tess's underwear into his box and get caught by tess, responce could be you like underwear so much lets see how you like a day inside them etc.
Author's Response:
Thanks BigJames, the story is starting to take on a life of its own, not sure how i want to play the dynamic between Tess and Tom yet.