Date: August 24 2020 9:17 PM Title: Better
This was Amazing!! It really had me at the edge of my seat😆🔥🔥 I loved the partnership between Ben and Taylor.
The twists and strategies in these chapters are truly something worth rereading!!
Date: August 24 2020 7:12 PM Title: Better
This was Amazing!! It really had me at the edge of my seat😆🔥🔥 I loved the partnership between Ben and Taylor.
The twists and strategies in these chapters are truly something worth rereading!!
[Report This]Date: August 30 2016 11:55 AM Title: Better
Don't know how I missed this back when it was "Most Recent." Ah, well! It was still a nice wrap-up. Although, it's a little ominous that these Alpha reactionaries might be more organized, and wider-spread, than initially assumed.
Author's Response:
Thanks! And yeah, despite how things turned out well on the whole, the ending is definitely supposed to leave a certain ominous air behind.
Date: May 18 2016 8:56 PM Title: Better
Good story. I for one am glad that Ben survived but I'm a sucker for a happy ending. Makes sense that Taylor has to go through a probationary period. It looks like she and Ben have the makings of a beautiful friendship so she'll have her little pal's support. Overall, an enjoyable and exciting tale and a nice use of the Omega setting.
Author's Response:
Thanks for reviewing again; I've appreciated hearing your thoughts on this one.
Date: May 18 2016 3:08 AM Title: Better
Okay ending.
I ended up liking this story less than I thought I would, though.
The plot was alright. I liked that despite the strength of the Omegas they can be outsmarted and that the Beta's and Alpha's they protect are also their weakness. Even if Kayla's mere presence in the universe undermines this. If she wasn't out in space then this entire plot would be done by chapter 2.
I think Ben should've died at the end instead of being miraculously saved by Melody. Suddenly challenging the terrorists just as Ben came out of the roof was simply way too convenient. It made his would be sacrifice not as good.
There was some eye rolly stuff like the super obvious not-fox news conservative media station pestering the Omegas. It wouldn't have been so bad if that wasn't the only outsider viewpoint on the hostage situation.
Overall it wasn't better than Inheritance which dealt with the flaws of the Aegis system and why Alphas wouldn't trust Omegas.
Author's Response:
I'm sorry you weren't as big a fan of this one. Ackbar doesn't want too much on this divulged yet, so all I can say for now is that it wasn't convenience that caused the challenge to the terrorists. Not really sure what to say about the news station; personal preference, I suppose. There probably are other outsider viewpoints, but those happened to be the ones hanging out around the building.
In many ways, I enjoyed writing Inheritance more than this one, but I wanted to try writing something in the Omegaverse that utilized a much grander scale. I appreciate your feedback on this one.