Now this story is good. I mean really good.

The characters just seem so real! I feel like I know those guys in real life, and they have great chemistry together, and I like how they treat one another, especially with the playful insults.

First chapter was scary, Halloween scary. I recommend you make something scary for October. The details about the tree, fence, graves, eerie sounds, disgusting smells, creaking wood, and the best one in my opinion, the locked door.

The locked door always gets me, becuase that's when you know you are trapped, and that's scary.

My favorite character is Dustin. His random knowledge in serious situations makes their conversations comical. Blake and John seem the same to me. Charles is emotional and I could easily see him be a clown. However, Charles is the key to make the group scared, becuase he is an easy target and if this old woman wants to take a pick, it would be Charles.

"Yoda's mom." Haha!

Man, this story is very different to your other works, but this one is just as good as the others, and if not better.

I can't wait for the next chapter!