Reviews For Hallway Meeting
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Reviewer: realRS Signed [Report This]
Date: August 02 2015 10:44 AM Title: Chapter 1

Oooof. I'm not usually a fan of violence in stories but the casual power here was very entertaining. Loved Kristen's transformation

Reviewer: DollsizeHarlequin Signed starstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: July 04 2015 7:29 PM Title: Chapter 1

This is good, i would certainly read a seequal of it if you were to make it into a series. Your 'action' scenes with the crushing and the interation and such were really nice paced and had enough description to allow the imagination to fill in anything else the reader may need.

Interactive dialogue was good and didn't bog the story down with dull repetition or needless padding and overall was realistic.

The only issue i would say i have is that you can afford to be a little more liberal with the scene-setting descriptions. People come into a story expecting to be told what the characters look like for example, but we dont have that here, all we know is that your main character had school shoes and white tights on...

Perhaps in future take the time at the start to fully set a scene, it really helps with reader immersion.

Awesome work on the slave girl by the way ;)  That was good fun hehe

Ems.

Reviewer: wwebby Signed [Report This]
Date: July 04 2015 4:52 AM Title: Chapter 1

Wow, scary! I do not normally read stories this violent, however, it was very creative with the characters, so I did enjoy it

Reviewer: AdamX Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: July 03 2015 6:28 PM Title: Chapter 1

Bravo, I hope it continues.

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