Date: September 15 2015 8:00 PM Title: Through an Earthly Shackle
I've touched on this before but I would pay to see the end of this because there is absolutelty never any conflict resolution. It seems like more of the same over and over. You addressed my concern awhile back and, it feels like like this story is stuck in a time bubble. Ellis goes here and one is upset, Ellis goes there and another is upset....over and over again.......FINISH THE STORY dude. If it needs or you feel its worthy of a sequel write one but this innane repetetion.............Its like an animal you should put to bed.
Author's Response:
fair enough! I will say you do make a good point. I think perhaps that I have been staving off the ending because I feel like the readers need a lot of exposure to both of them. I've slowly started to realize that the complexity of the characters is not aided by the extended look at their lives but rather hindered by it. I do, hopefully, to end it within the next three chapters. Thank you for the criticism! It drives me to improve!
Date: September 15 2015 12:23 PM Title: Through an Earthly Shackle
Woah, Amora didnt do herself any favors by saying shed massacre more people if she ever got out. Whereas Vera is intelligent and cunning, Amora seems like the type of person thar just blurts out what comes to mind without filters...I dont know if id go so far as to say shes an idiot but shes not very bright.