Date: April 08 2018 9:47 AM Title: Chapter 1
I'm happy to hear that, and I agree about Jack Dalton. I can't wait to learn what his relationship to 'the Puck' or whoever he may be, is. I'm just guessing, but He fits so well into that character's profile, that I've already ID'd him as in that role. Don't tell me I'm wrong... I would be greatly confused to learn that there were two such personalities among the Gods!
Date: October 11 2015 7:29 PM Title: Chapter 1
@Carycomic, I don't see why I would hate you for that. I found it funny. Besides, I need pics or vids to be that aroused.
[Report This]Date: June 07 2015 7:53 PM Title: Chapter 1
Intriguing story man! Well done!
I wasn't sure where this was headed, even after the hunt scenes. I thought it would get supernatural pretty quickly with some ominous danger looming in the distance, but the story took a wonderful turn after that, especially the last chapter that has me completely hooked.
You devise your characters really well. They pop out your writing and become alive so easily in my head, especially the male characters. I'm not sure if it's because of the nature of the story, but you definitely write the males much better than the females. They all seem the same, to be perfectly honest. Except Hilde of course, she's definitely apart from all the others.
Lastly, I can definitely say that your writing style is among the best I've seen here around, most likely the best. As a fellow writer, I can only learn from you. :)
Author's Response:
Thanks for the tremendous compliment considering the number of talented writers sharing their work. The female characters for the most part require a broader brush to properly depict for me, though Clarice, Hilde, and Abbie are fleshing out well. I hope i can continue to provide a quality story that readers enjoy.
Date: June 05 2015 1:15 AM Title: Chapter 1
Glad to help. However, by editing the chapter, I think my review for chapter 19 disappeared, so now I kinda forgot what I mentioned in it.
Well, at least I know it was a good review. :)
[Report This]Date: May 29 2015 2:31 PM Title: Chapter 1
Just begun reading this one (Chapter 5 so far). You're a really good writer man! Keep up the good work. Can't wait to see how this little threesome develops. :D
Author's Response:
Thank you, enjoy!
Date: May 17 2015 5:15 PM Title: Chapter 1
Actually, abc, there IS a leather-making industry in Corinth, Greece. But, you're half-right to the extent that it's no softer than leather made in any other country.
Author's Response:
Thanks Carycomic for some clarification. abc is right though in the context I used it, it was a chrysler marketing ploy. I have amended the story. Cheers
Date: May 16 2015 8:16 PM Title: Chapter 1
In Chapter 11....
Tbere's no such thing as Corinthian leather. That was a bullshit marketing phrase to sell Chrysler Cordobas in the 1970s.
Also, with all of the similar sounding names, it gets confusing.
Other than light, good so far!
Author's Response:
Thanks for the feedback, I have amended the description. I'm am pleased there are elements to this tale you enjoy!
[Report This]Date: May 12 2015 9:40 AM Title: Chapter 1
But if you could also add some feet and ass to this story then it would be completely perfect!!! :)
[Report This]Date: May 12 2015 9:38 AM Title: Chapter 1
This whole story is so damn beautiful!! I'm going to want a sequel after this is over!!
Date: May 10 2015 6:39 PM Title: Chapter 1
Wow
Author's Response:
Thanks!
[Report This]Date: May 10 2015 2:32 AM Title: Chapter 1
I agree 100% with Tom on this one!!! I wish this were a movie!!! Please you NEED to continue this story! PLEASE.