Reviewer: Endorium Signed [Report This]
Date: December 19 2016 1:39 PM Title: The Crew

Good job on making a lurker come out of lurking. I hope that you find the inspiration you need to continue this story given that the characters in this story are some of the best written characters in my opinion.

Reviewer: iHategiants666 Signed [Report This]
Date: August 31 2015 1:27 PM Title: The Crew

Hi. Just wanted to know when you're resuming this series. It's been nearly two months. Do you plan to get back on it when you're finished with "Adrift"?

Reviewer: iHategiants666 Signed [Report This]
Date: May 28 2015 12:56 PM Title: The Crew

I am still waiting on your next chapter.. and I would like to know what you have planned.

 

I also want to know why Lyria was so afraid of anyone finding out, if she could convince them that they were in deserving of their punishment.

Reviewer: iHategiants666 Signed [Report This]
Date: May 20 2015 6:23 PM Title: The Crew

So, you're saying that Lyria is being completely honest? Acting like she's the victim here? Or did they have a good reason to screw her over?

I mean they can't help it if it's their job, right? And how does that justify Lyria's actions?

 

So, my problem with Sally is that she can accept her partner's sociopathic actions, so simply, and not feel even remotely conflicted. If she had simply killed them, then I would have seen how Sally could have understood that.

But she has tortured them, brutalized them beyond belief, even eaten them out of pure spite! Is Sally almost as sadistic as she is? That's the only she could rationalize Lyria's actions, in my opinion.

 

As for Sam, I can get that he would be subverted. But to this degree is impossible. He was one of the devoted loyal Shadow Runners, right? He would not became her slave through some twisted form of love. The only way, he would serve her is through fear. In fact, I figured that he could take advantage of Lyria's weakness towards him, her sick affection for him as a human dildo.

So you have him turn down freedom for nothing.

 

How much more are you gonna go, already? I have enjoyed the suspense of the prisoners. I have beared the constant masturbating, the vore and the reckless abuse that Lyria has inflicted on her victims... but enough is ENOUGH!!!

You've already milked the sex slavery of its worth. Now it's all cut-and-dried and I don't see it being anymore fun if Sally joins in.

It's time for a change in setting, and a change in dynamics. Have them escape, have them get eaten, have Sam finally break free of his desire to be Lyria's doormat.

 

Anything but the same old, same old.

Author's Response:

I never said it justified her actions. She is most certainly a bitch and a fairly cruel individual however she probably wouldn't be in charge of a facility that makes liberal use of sentiant beings as test subjects if she wasn't.

As for Sally, possibly. I won't touch on that at the moment.

So, Shadowrunners aren't exactly what you would call loyal. They are criminals, outcasts, dregs of society usually. They make their living on espionage and skirting outside of the law. Its not like he was a part of some grand order, most shadowrunner cells are loosely connected at best. Though you do make a few valid points on some things worthy of thought.

Stagnation can lead to dull situations, of that much we are in agreement. I won't sit here and pretend something is flawless if its not. I will give the matter some thought.

Reviewer: toiletplumber Signed [Report This]
Date: April 28 2015 1:26 PM Title: The Crew

I'm a huge shadowrun fanatic.  I've pretty much sworn off of most other RPGs for SR.  I must say you are doing the shadowrun setting justice.  There are things I could nitpick, but overall it certainly feels sixth world.  If you don't mind me asking, where have you been getting your setting info from?  I know Yamatetsu changed their name to EVO in the later versions of the game which is why I ask.  

As for the story.  Loving it.  Loved the vampire character.  Loved the initial shrinking scene and examination.  Even the non fetish stuff in the beginning is as exciting as any of the shadowrun novels I've read.  Keep it up and I hope this story lasts a long time.

Author's Response:

I actually ended up getting introduced to it through the game Shadowrun Returns. I'd never heard of the setting before that so I ended up digging into it on online wikis after playing it and then Dragonfall and found the setting to be utterly fascinating. I've been pondering trying to get into the Pen and Paper of it, though I'm still knee deep in Dark Heresy and Rogue Trader. Most of my info is probably outdated as I actually had no idea about the change from Yamatetsu to EVO and the move from Japan to Russia. So you probably know way more than I haha. Still, I'm happy I could at least convey the setting despite some discrepancies.

Heh, I actually had stumbled across the HMHVV lore a bit before I had thought up the character. I had been intending on her just being some decker, but I wanted to play around with the disease briefly and how most people would probably consider them kind of like monsters in the closet.

Thanks for the review and hope I can keep your interest going forward!

Reviewer: OneInch Signed [Report This]
Date: April 23 2015 4:49 PM Title: The Crew

I'm loving this story so much, I love Lyrias character. Nothing like I've read before, I can't wait for more.

Amy :)

Author's Response:

Thanks for the read! Hope I can continue to impress.