Date: April 09 2015 3:33 AM Title: Chapter 4
Wow,poor Ned. What will happen now? Will the mother feel more confident in holding him.will the world really view all little people as bugs or pets and nothing more? Will Ned's wife come looking for him? And what would she do if she found him? A plot twist would be if Ned's wife found another shrunken man while searching for her husband. How would she treat the new little man in her life?
Date: April 03 2015 12:02 PM Title: Chapter 1
This is superbly written,very realistic interaction and reactions, detail and flow is fantastic, story just unfolds very comfortably. If a world such as this existed, this story gives the feeling that this is how it would be.
Very much look forward to more of this. Great job!
Date: April 03 2015 3:26 AM Title: Chapter 1
Chapter 1 was excellent. You painted a picture with your writing. Loved Ned's feeling of independence by walking ginger. His plan of leaving the shoes was a good one. You describe his feelings toward his wife at 21 inches, how will he feel now? Why did she take a picture of him? Was it to show a girlfriend, was it to blind him for an easy capture? Seeing the little mans struggles makes it so realistic. The capture or escape is always a thrilling part. Nice story. Diesel