Date: April 03 2015 12:02 PM Title: Chapter 1
This is superbly written,very realistic interaction and reactions, detail and flow is fantastic, story just unfolds very comfortably. If a world such as this existed, this story gives the feeling that this is how it would be.
Very much look forward to more of this. Great job!
Date: April 03 2015 3:26 AM Title: Chapter 1
Chapter 1 was excellent. You painted a picture with your writing. Loved Ned's feeling of independence by walking ginger. His plan of leaving the shoes was a good one. You describe his feelings toward his wife at 21 inches, how will he feel now? Why did she take a picture of him? Was it to show a girlfriend, was it to blind him for an easy capture? Seeing the little mans struggles makes it so realistic. The capture or escape is always a thrilling part. Nice story. Diesel