[Report This]Date: August 22 2016 5:48 PM Title: Chapter 3: Captured and Her Name Is...
Cute conflict. I like how Matt reconciles pretty quickly to the situation after a few false starts. What's more exciting is a cultured, reasonable giantess living in the wilderness... young as she is.
Author's Response:
Sad to say the idea wasnt mine- the credit goes to Pixis for that one. Still, the idea intrigued me, and i felt that it might be interesting for someone's schema get shattered by someone who broke that stereotype. I also reckoned Amelia to be a somewhat independent type of gal.
Date: January 27 2015 5:25 AM Title: Chapter 3: Captured and Her Name Is...
You don't usually hear your skin ripping, often times it's felt. Uh, also, I felt his acceptance of her/his pity was too fast and forthcoming, seeing as his village was destroyed, likely family killed too, by giants.
Author's Response:
fair enough.
[Report This]Date: January 27 2015 12:19 AM Title: Chapter 3: Captured and Her Name Is...
So far, this story is amazing! I really changed my opinion of this story big-time from the first chapter. This even reminds me of some of Pixis early works...
But to be completely honest, that first chapter does this story a disservice. It looks like a quick paragraph 1st chapter of a story that someone writes to mind vent and is probably gonna abandon shortly after.
No joke, I was THIS close to putting this story on my 'why bother' list after that first chapter... Its not that it's badly written, it's that its short and doenst really hook my attention.
If you don't introduce your giantess in the first chapter then I think having a lot of 'nothing' happening is probably the worst thing you can do. And in that chapter, besides being introduced to the protagonist and getting the knowledge that hes on the hunt nothing interesting happens.
In my opinion, you should either re-write it, to make it more interesting, or combine it with chapter 2. Hope this helps, overall this is a great story so far and it'd be a shame if more people were offput by the 'meh' first chapter!
Author's Response:
I dig what youre saying. i combined the first two chapters for the sake of this run-through. I'm really glad you like it- the idea of a gentle giantess in medieval setting was something i got from Pixis. In fact, we collaborated on the sequel of this story. I'll probably post that in the future. it's about 5 times long in its entirety. this is 50ish pages long in MS word.