Reviews For Marvin and Jeff.
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Reviewer: 280077s Signed [Report This]
Date: December 24 2016 9:45 AM Title: Sandra the doll

I loved the first 7 chapters, and I'm straight. The 8th was good as well, but perhaps you could separate it into its own story? 



Author's Response:

Thanks for the tip.  I've been writing now in coiledfist.net the last two years because oft some homophobic responses Herr, and habe totally forgoten about this story Herr.  You are right,  that with the Sandra should become its own story.  Thanks for reading it all!!! I wish you a nice Christmas time!!! LG aus Berlin

Reviewer: neorodent Signed star [Report This]
Date: October 04 2014 2:55 PM Title: How it started.

I realize there is now a generation that learned to write via text messaging, but real cogent writing requires paragraphs.  A series of disconnected sentences can not make a convincing scene and it doesn't flow.  



Author's Response:

Thanks for the response.  

Reviewer: stargate1990 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: October 03 2014 11:25 AM Title: How it started.

I really like the idea of this story.  I just wish your characters wern't so old.  I love the fact that he expects his gf!  Wonderful story, only complaint is the older men but that's a personal prefrence.



Author's Response:

Thanks for the positive feedback.  I am not a Profi writer, just doing it as a hobby.  Hugs Form me...

Reviewer: lazyb Signed [Report This]
Date: October 03 2014 3:56 AM Title: How it started.

Am writing now a new chapter.  Will try and post it anew every day!  Thanks for the comment.  Keep 'em comming!!! Don't forget the rating, please! I liked your doll-house story too!  Very erotic, with enough fun for the whole family !! Keep up the good work.

Curtis

Reviewer: realRS Signed [Report This]
Date: October 02 2014 3:30 PM Title: How it started.

Looking forward to seeing where it goes

Author's Response:

Thank you.  Am working on it.  I liked your doll house story too.  I certainly am not able to write like that.  Thank you very mich. Curtis

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