Reviewer: Westland Signed [Report This]
Date: November 04 2008 6:06 PM Title: Chapter 1

Well, I got to say man this is one hell of work. I was very moved by our hero as he battled against the world at an Action Figure height. I love the style of how it was wrote and it kept the story going. The torture scenes with Naomi, Cheryl and the rest of the horrible sluts made really feel bad for him as things get worst and worst.

On other notes I was extremely happy as Ray used his mind and wits to find the best possible solution. Going against the odds and doing anything he can. Again I was easily affected once the shit happens and his plans backfires.

Each character fulfill their roles perfectly. I especially enjoyed the moments with Nicole and Suzy as our hero finally gets a break. I'm a feet man myself at times so the scenes with those two were awesome. 

Oi and another thing I like was the jokes, philosophy and Ray's reasoning through out the story. But at the end, the last chapter has to be down right the best of the whole story. Our hero finally having a happy ending seems to me the best ending possible. Though I would wish that Nicole can somehow escape away from her cruel mother and stay with Ray. Their relationship seems too cute to break up like that. Find me heartless but I laughed when they found Paul dead along with Rachel in a coma and Naomi crying. The perfect karma, revenge, and epiphany and all that. Dues Ex Machinima indeed=D

Author's Response: There's a lot of brutality in the story and, frankly, I would have never been able to write it if I hadn't known from the outset that I was going to give Ray a happy ending. I did leave a few plot threads dangling, and once I finish my current opus (Summer Job), I'd like to write another story about Ray and Suzy, set several years after the first. Will Nicole still be living with her mother? Will Rachel still be in a coma? Will Ray's father still be dead? Tune in and find out! Thanks for reading, Westland!

Reviewer: Alpha2099 Signed [Report This]
Date: October 24 2008 10:11 PM Title: Chapter 1

I really enjoyed this story.  It was very well-written and flowed nicely.  I especially liked the part where Naomi stomps on the car.

My creative writing teacher once said that if you introduce a gun into the story, it has to go off before the end.  That's exactly what went through my head when the car first appeared.  I knew it would meet a fateful end.

Again, well done.

Author's Response: I think I had that same creative writing teacher ;-) Thanks, Alpha. Glad you liked it!

Reviewer: Natch Signed [Report This]
Date: April 15 2008 9:45 PM Title: Chapter 1

This is the best I have ever read ever on this site, period. This is going to be a bit of a long review, but you deserve it, for the sheer length of this story.

 

I first looked at this story when I looked at the little sidebar to the left showing the 3 most recent stories. I picked the one with the R rating, just because I was in that sort of mood. I decided to see if you had any other stories, and came across this one.

 

I gasped when I read the word count was nearing 150,000 words. That is very hefty for a fan fiction. The most recent book I read was around 220,000 words (Stranger in a Strange Land, if you care to know), and this was pretty damn close in my book. Then I saw the number of reviews. 11. I felt this doesn't do something of this length any justice at all, considering you put so much work into it. I decided to read it a bit, to see if it was because your writing style was poor. I read some of intro, and concluded this was clearly not the case, and that people have just too small of an attention span.

 

I made the decision to read your novel (yes, it's a novel) in its entirety, partly because it was good enough to keep me interested, and partly do it justice. You put much effort into this, I can tell, just by the sheer number of words it contains. So often, I see great stories written by people that never end of getting completed. But you completed this one. And that made it worthy of reading. So no more than 8 hours ago, I bit into it. 5 hours later, I'm at the part shortly after he comes back after "running away".  I felt the suspense at what was going to happen next, true and utter suspense, not some of idle curiosity about what's coming, but real suspense. Then I did a double-check. You got me caring about this character to the point where I am sweating my balls off wondering just what in the devil's unholy and god damned name is going to happen to him at one of the many climaxes of this story. And that statement is true in more than one way har har har.

 

 This basically chiseled into the stone tablet of my brain that you, my friend, write a very mean story. Thus, I decided to review this grand tale. After finishing it, I sat back and am typing the review you now see before you. This story has been long, and I honestly can say I did not want it to end. Seriously. I would like to see a sequel, possibly starting it off sometime around the Christmas vacation in which he gets to see Suzy, but I'm not sure. Anyways, the point is this is a great story, and deserves great praise. You my friend have a resolve I have rarely seen before, and were it not for the content of this story (GTS in general) I would fully urge you to try and get it published. Hell, try to anyways; you might have a shot at landing in the "alternative literature" section of the bookstore.

 So there you have it. A long winded review. I babbled a lot, but I just felt I had to say so much about this novel. Yes, by definition of length, it is a novel. I will read all your work from here on out, and will graciously review any story you write. You my good sir are a great writer.

Author's Response: Thanks, Natch! I appreciate the thoughtful review and the high praise. I don't think I'll ever actually submit it (I wrote it between chapters of a "real" novel whenever I wanted to cut loose and blow off some steam). I know it meanders considerably at times and tends to be repetitive (one of the dangers of publishing a chapter at a time), but I'm still quite proud of how it turned out.rnrnI'm planning on a sequel that will tie HOMUNCULUS and THE SUMMER JOB together. Of course, the rate I write these things, I may die of old age before I get started ;-)rnrnThanks again!

Reviewer: Jester Signed [Report This]
Date: January 14 2008 9:12 PM Title: Chapter 1

Awesome story, concept, and writing.  My only regret is that is one giant chapter, instead of several smaller, easier to read chapters.

Author's Response: Sorry about the long-ass chapter. I just signed on here last year, and I learned that somebody else had created a Cayce account and posted this story. Asuka was kind enough to reset the account and let me take over. One day, when I've got some free time, I'll see if I can break the story up into chapters without losing the comments.rnrnThanks for reading, Jester. Glad you liked it!

Reviewer: JohanSutherland Signed [Report This]
Date: September 26 2007 10:14 AM Title: Chapter 1

Dude that was good. I loved our little hero because he's smart. I mean, why does it take so long to others to ealise how useless it to fight when you're sooooo tiny. Here we can see a tiny dude using his brain, and doing great. I realy liked qhen he drove "momma" crazy. "Do you think your husband will come back tonight?"

Very great story 

Author's Response: I really enjoyed the way the balance of power kept shifting between Ray and his stepmom, and it made the story a lot more fun to write. I've always hated passive protagonists in GTS stories, and I thought it would be cool to have a hero who uses his wits to occasionally get the upper hand. Of course, when it backfired, there'd be hell to pay...rnrnThanks for reading, Johan. Glad you enjoyed the story!

Reviewer: dajo Signed [Report This]
Date: January 01 2007 9:25 AM Title: Chapter 1

I cant remember reading a better story. Though I would have loved a little bit more of sexual play between the boy and his stepmom.

Author's Response: Poor Ray. You guys just don't want him to catch a break, do you? ;-)rnrnThanks for reading, Dajo!

Reviewer: billyevil Signed [Report This]
Date: December 20 2006 12:17 AM Title: Chapter 1

I enjoyed this story. You really made it fun and gave it a nice love story ending, which I think is cool. There isn't enough happy endings in this genre and maybe we should try that now and again. I really enjoyed the parts where he was punished with the feet. One thing I didn't get was why he was so whiny about how his food was presented. Seemed like he was a bit spoiled that way to me, but then again I've never been his size. Thank you for the story.

Author's Response: If you're going to just beat the hell out of your protagonist for 200+ pages, the least you can do is give the poor bastard a happy ending ;-) Glad you liked it, Billy!

Reviewer: picjusbro Signed [Report This]
Date: December 13 2006 12:14 AM Title: Chapter 1

Story was really good probably one of the best I have read in years I just wish there more interaction bewteen the shrinky and nicole and her feet.

Author's Response: To tell you the truth, I originally hadn't planned on that much interaction between Nicole and Ray (other than some mild tormenting and holding/petting). But just about the time I was publishing this story on Giantess Magic, a debate started raging about whether or not including a minor character in a story made it child pornography. The arguments got a bit silly, especially when people started invoking Hitler and 9/11 in their arguments. And just to spite them, I started adding scenes I hadn't originally intended to include. Looking back, some of them seem awkward and a bit ill-advised. But I think some of them work quite well. I'll leave it to you to decide which ;-) Anyway, thanks for reading Picjusbro. Glad you liked it!