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Reviewer: Jimbob Signed [Report This]
Date: September 01 2014 6:44 PM Title: Chapter 5

Might need to adjust some formatting on this chapter. The transitions from past to present were really rough and I got a little lost.

Was the woman on the elevator present or past? Couldn't tell as she wasn't mentioned again.

Was the scene of her serving drinks still two years ago? Or more recent?



Author's Response:

Woman in the elevator is present, and the drinks were a year after Linda got the job. I forgot to space properly, sorry. 

Reviewer: tinyguy Signed [Report This]
Date: September 01 2014 5:11 PM Title: Chapter 5

Awesome job once again! :)

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