Reviews For Unaware Paige
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Reviewer: sarashrunk Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: May 13 2015 4:52 PM Title: Paiges Room.

Very Good.

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Author's Response:

Thank you. I will continue soon even though it seems some dont like my writing seems even more like it.

Reviewer: zol Signed [Report This]
Date: September 17 2014 4:48 PM Title: Chapter 4

You should take a book in your hands and compare your writing style with someone who knows how to write and narrate. Stories mostly never are in simple present tense but in past tense. Also it's really bad if 99,999% of your stories sentences begin with the same word or like "person a ...", "person b...". This is more like a script but nothing like a story.



Author's Response:

Alright well thanks for the review if tried to compare my writing to other peoples writing on here and make it kind of the same style but i know i have lots of improvement to do might have to just quit posting for awhile and just practice my  writing

Reviewer: Haloichigo Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: September 03 2014 4:17 PM Title: Chapter 3

I like the way that this is advancing, I cant wait for the next chapter to see what happens to the group

Author's Response:

thanks for reading the next chapter will be about the group i plan to add it soon

Reviewer: blackairow Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: September 03 2014 6:37 AM Title: Chapter 3

Hmm more shurnken people eh?



Author's Response:

I was thinking it would be a good way to take the story

Reviewer: mimiru888 Signed starstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: August 08 2014 4:20 PM Title: Chapter 2

Interesting so far, keep it up. :)

I'm curious to see if that box under her bed in the first chapter is going to make an appearance in the 3rd :P

Author's Response:

Thank you :) and i have a great idea for the box

Reviewer: Jamilton Signed [Report This]
Date: August 08 2014 6:57 AM Title: The beggining

I was wondering when you will continue this because I like this build up.

Reviewer: blackairow Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: August 04 2014 3:51 AM Title: The beggining

Like the story so far. Look forward to  the the next chapter

Reviewer: Haloichigo Signed starstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: August 04 2014 1:09 AM Title: The beggining

Good start, I hope future chapters would be longer.



Author's Response:

The first chapter will still be longer, thanks for the review

Reviewer: andymich65 Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: August 03 2014 8:59 PM Title: The beggining

Great start!! Please continue with the socked feet too!! Love unaware

Reviewer: Michael1258 Signed [Report This]
Date: August 03 2014 7:25 PM Title: The beggining

im all for the unaware stories ive made a couple myself.

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