[Report This]Date: August 09 2014 5:39 AM Title: Chapter 18: Fun at the Beach - Part 2
Sounds like that gambling ring must have been in operation for a while. The cops have now broken it up, and all but the 'one' guy who wouldn't fight, seems to have been saved...
Tris could identify that woman that 'bought' him. -'I wonder if we'll hear more about who he was?'
Great chapter! Tris doesn't like the idea of Kai having a little girlfriend,... Christy on the other hand.... H'm, I think I can see where this is going...
Lot's of possibilities... ;`)
Date: August 09 2014 1:09 AM Title: Chapter 18: Fun at the Beach - Part 2
They probably start chipping shrunken people or something. The shrinking is still a recent event, so they're still be treated as human. It pains me to think that this will go the way of other stories like this. Where shrunken people's rights are stripped and are treated as animals or objects by the law. Tris and Kai's relationship is strained as it is, and I'm sure Christy is still looking for opportunities to get into Tris' pants. Before the introduction of Serena, my solution would have been a 3 way relationship. Now I'm not so sure, unless someone adopts her. Or the government seizes all shrunken people for their own safetly. Keep writing!
Author's Response: I don't plan on turning the story into something like that, I introduced this chapter to look into how certain groups of people see the shrinkees, one particular minded group being a small group of 80 people. The other group being kids at the orphanage, picking on the smaller kid and not realizing the extent of what they are doing. Thanks for writing down your concerns, I'm glad I could answer them. :) The story still has a long way to go from here.
Date: August 08 2014 9:33 PM Title: Chapter 18: Fun at the Beach - Part 2
Wondering when the F/f tag would become relavent.
Author's Response: Yes I've been planning this for a while. :)