Reviews For BFG: Bully
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Reviewer: SpookyTaco Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: August 29 2014 7:21 AM Title: Payback

I was not expecting to read more than one chapter. However the story captivated me because I wanted to see what happened to Dawn. I actually like this story better than Escape, primarily because you show Dawn as more of a flawed individual. She's humiliated in front of the entire school and everyone can relate to embarassing experiences. She's vengeful but far from evil. Her boyfriend isn't some super rich handsome guy with two jets. The story isn't super complicated with government conspiracies and there aren't too many characters to keep track of. It's just a better story in my opinion.

Now I'm not sure where the plot would go from here, but honestly, I don't think it needs much of a plot so long as Dawn and the other characters continue to develop and have goals. Nice work.



Author's Response:

Hey thanks for the review Spooky! I get what you mean with Dawn and how she is more realistic as a flawed individual which in turns makes her more relatable. Yeah, we all know what its like to be embarassed and definitely relatable. Dawn would never do something like breaking an arm or leg because someone was mean to her or anything, I like to believe she knows how far she should go. 

As for plot, I have 3 stories planned for Dawn, they'll need time because I need to work on Escape Redux and my Intersizables story Downtrodden. You can check out Incorporated if you like, give it a little read. If you want to see more about Dawn, give the main BFG a read as she shows up in Chapters 18-27 and the last chapter of BFG: Limbo. 

I get the problems I have with Escape, too many characters that weren't fleshed out right, plotholes bigger than the one in the ozone layer and I kept building up Jessica to be some perfect being and a goddess but we all knew she wasn't. Characters around Jessica were either running away in fear or falling over her and trying to impress her or something. No more, characters will have a more varied response, I'd like to say more but it would only spoil the plot. Just know that these problems are being worked on. So now you see that Jessica is more badass and unimpressed by Jack, who is now some sort of a rich prick who hates Jessica because he sees her as a monster despite Jessica saving his life. 

  I kept what I thought would work, trimmed out parts that were redundant and also filled out characters who needed it, it won't be so shallow from now on. Thanks for the input!

Reviewer: The Doctor Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: August 27 2014 10:14 AM Title: Payback

Glad to see that she had her revenge. Hopefully now they'll know not to mess with a 200 foot giantess.



Author's Response:

If they were smart they wouldn't need that lesson in the first place, 200 foot giantess ought to have been big enough of a deterrence. 

Reviewer: Jimbob Signed [Report This]
Date: August 27 2014 9:28 AM Title: Payback

Was kind of hoping for George to break out from under Edmund's yoke there.



Author's Response:

This isn't the last you'll see of them for sure, I'll tell you that. 

Reviewer: gadgetmawombo Signed [Report This]
Date: August 27 2014 2:31 AM Title: Payback

Great finale! I hope this isn't the last we see of Dawn!



Author's Response:

It definitely isn't, I have 3 more stories planned. I'll get around to them when I have the time. 

Reviewer: gadgetmawombo Signed [Report This]
Date: August 27 2014 2:31 AM Title: Payback

Great finale! I hope this isn't the last we see of Dawn!

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