[Report This]Date: October 27 2014 12:03 PM Title: Chapter 14: Mommy's Maw
The way you've written Scott's feeling of dread was remarkable. Likewise the way in which Judy broached the subject about her problem tooth. I still don't know what to make of how you keep reiterating how her being uncharacteristically nicer and such now, almost as if in a foreboding way or that Judy is feeling "different" love towards her son... At any rate, I'm glad you didn't rush through the process of her getting him acquainted with her maw, makes for a better read in my opinion.
I'm kinda curious now seeing as how we're going to be on chapter 18 with little to no mention of Judy's political endeavors, will there be another story for that or is this one going to be a lot longer?
aaron
PS by "different" I meant in a platonic way.
Author's Response:
Thanks for reading, man. All I'll say for now is that there is a reason I keep bringing up how uncharacteristically kind she's seeming. Judy's political endeavors, for the most part, happen in the background of this story, though particularly near the end, we'll see a lot of that come to the forefront. This is also going to be a longer story, coming in at around 30 chapters.
You're right about the platonic thing. I of course write the story in a certain way so that fetish readers can enjoy it, but Judy herself is not meant to be acting sexually toward her son.
[Report This]Date: October 27 2014 7:54 AM Title: Chapter 14: Mommy's Maw
Wow things just aren't getting any better for him...at all.
I hope she has a plan in case she accidentally swallows him. She wouldn't just toss him in there without a plan would she?
Author's Response:
Judy's confident enough that she probably assumes the only plan B she needs is spitting him back up if he takes a tumble.
[Report This]Date: October 24 2014 5:39 AM Title: Chapter 13: A Familiar Face
Great story! I haven't read all of the previous ones but I jumped into this easily enough. Compelling interaction and dialog works to immerse the reader in spite of the missing bits of history. However, it does tempt me to read some of the earlier ones.
Author's Response:
Thanks for reading man, glad you're liking it. And not that I'm biased, but definitely check out the earlier ones. ;)
[Report This]Date: October 23 2014 9:34 AM Title: Chapter 13: A Familiar Face
Was it Kyle that left the remote for Scott, or did Judy or Maggie just accidentally left it there?
Author's Response:
More than likely, the remote was just left there accidentally. Maggie's the only one who intentionally places it anywhere while thinking of Scott.
[Report This]Date: October 23 2014 2:01 AM Title: Chapter 1: MVP
Hmmm, the guy on TV has a connection with Scott, and he recognized the face. More importantly, Scott's mom recognized the face, so we know that this person on TV will be a major factor soon.
Different clothes? Then u mention waterproof? Hmmm. And she says this right after she strokes his torso. That sequence just sparks so many ideas that it's fun to keep guessing what it all means.
I guess I won't know until the next chapter. I can't wait!
Author's Response:
He will indeed be a factor soon, and certainly more so in the next story.
Whatever it means, it's more than likely not something very fun for Scott. ;)
[Report This]Date: October 22 2014 8:15 PM Title: Chapter 13: A Familiar Face
Dammit I'm curious now.
Author's Response:
Hehehe.
[Report This]Date: October 22 2014 4:35 PM Title: Chapter 13: A Familiar Face
Ah, I have a feeling I know who that guy is but my memory is fuzzy at times.
Author's Response:
The guy will be explained before the story is over. Thanks for reading!
[Report This]Date: October 22 2014 11:38 AM Title: Chapter 13: A Familiar Face
You are really good at keeping Scott right on the edge of peace without ever acheiving it. It's really painful to see him earn these brief respits and not be capable of fully enjoying them because of everything else going on. Maggie's schemes, Judy's manipulative caring demeanor, Nancy's forced sexual advances, is this better than jail? Here's hoping he can reach Ella and sort things out. For better or worse at least he'd get some resolution to it.
I don't know who Walter Brandon is but I mean come on embezzling? That's just a dick move.
Author's Response:
Thanks! Especially by the end of this story, Scott's going to be asking himself that very same thing about jail.
[Report This]Date: October 22 2014 11:33 AM Title: Chapter 13: A Familiar Face
“First things first, though. We’re going to need to get you into some different clothes.”
Wonder if this means a bathing suit?
Great chapter where we learn Maggie is his only option to get in touch with Ella unless he could somehow convince Nancy to help(for favors of course).
But anyways, I'm looking forward to see what Judy has in store for her little Scott come next chapter. Also will we find out why he recognized the man on the news because it appeared Judy did as well.
Great chapter even though I'm not a fan of Kyle I understand his appearance was necessary. Wish we had been there when Judy shrunk him.
aaron
PS she should have a "little" slumber party with him, with maybe dome book club members and their tinies... Maybe that doesn't fit very well with this story but maybe a movie night with Judy as a reward for his good behavior or something... At his tiniest size of course
Author's Response:
In this case, "different" means "waterproof." He could try to convince Nancy to help him, though her forcible seduction of him revolves a lot around him being unable to get back with his girlfriend, so that may be tough. Though we haven't actually seen Judy shrink Kyle yet, that'll most likely be changing in the next story. You're right that there's not really a place for a slumber party scenario in this story, but I wouldn't rule it out for future ones.
Date: October 22 2014 8:30 AM Title: Chapter 13: A Familiar Face
Oh, so iiuc there will be a new jailmate... your had me worried, I feared there would be too many giant men! The most obvious idea would be that Judy takes him and leaves Scott to Maggie most of the time, but something tells me they won't have it so easy (and so easily KNOWN: not knowing is a big part of being shrunken in this house)
I'm trying to think what kind of task could possibly require him to wear different clothes, but no luck yet (still thinking - not a scuba suit I hope ;)
A small note: being small reasonably means that he will notice every movement, frown, anything a normal sized person does - Mrs Stevens should remember that the smaller he gets, the more difficult it becomes to hide any feeling she doesn't have under her full control.
Author's Response:
I won't yet comment on the person on TV; all I'll say is Kyle will continue to be the only male figure in the house at a normal height. ;)
Scuba suit is not a bad guess...
[Report This]Date: October 15 2014 11:04 PM Title: Chapter 12: Exceptions to the Rules
Ah Maggie, you devilish girl.
Author's Response:
;)
[Report This]Date: October 15 2014 9:07 PM Title: Chapter 12: Exceptions to the Rules
cant wait to read what happens next.
Oh and more Nancy please!
Author's Response:
Thanks man. There will be more Nancy later on, and in a much more vigorous helping.
[Report This]Date: October 15 2014 3:06 PM Title: Chapter 12: Exceptions to the Rules
“I know, I get it Mom. It’s fine. Do you have Scott?” the teen asked innocently, suddenly shifting her tone again. “I need him.”
“You need him?”
“Yeah. He’s all gross. I had him in my sock for the very end of the game, so I was gonna give him a bath.”
XD
That being said, you have no idea how much Maggie surprised me - twice, I expected her to let him thank sis before going on; yep, I briefly forgot who she is :)
Now, if I were him, I'd probably be looking for a way to ask Judy permission to talk to Ella - she was looking for him after all, he could ask mommy to call her for him, but he would have to think carefully about it.
PS
I had finally started to read your Omega story (looks great atm), this chapter is one more distraction from it; I hate you guy so very very much... ;p
Author's Response:
Thanks for reviewing! Glad Maggie can still surprise readers at this point in the series. Not a bad thought about asking Judy to call Ella, though I'll note that there's definitely something a bit more sinister going on with Scott's mother that might complicate that chance. I hope you enjoy the Omega story.
[Report This]Date: October 15 2014 11:14 AM Title: Chapter 12: Exceptions to the Rules
I'm actually liking this new Maggie. The whole tic for tac idea is great. Maybe she'll get her toenails painted after all. Love how she used the phone call against Scott even though he didn't technically do anything other than trying to answer the phone(can't remember if that was a rule). And using Ella as a means for Maggie to get what she wants is inspired. Still want to see Maggie at a tiny size with Judy but I'm willing to ride this new Maggie wave where ever it takes me.
aaron
PS how did Maggie slide off the bed with Scott between her legs? Maybe I just read that wrong but other than that great foreboding chapter I can't wait to see what happens next.
Author's Response:
Thanks for reading. Judy did say that Scott can't make calls, so Maggie wasn't necessarily making up a rule. And Maggie has a master manipulator for a mother, so she's learned from the best.
I see the issue with the wording that you pointed out. I meant to imply that she lifted her leg over Scott and slid off, so I changed that sentence to show it.
Date: October 15 2014 10:05 AM Title: Chapter 1: MVP
I really hope he gets to see Ella sooner or later.
[Report This]Date: October 15 2014 9:45 AM Title: Chapter 12: Exceptions to the Rules
It's pretty clear that Maggie will no longer hold back after this chapter.
"The kind where if you promise not to tell Mom about stuff, I’ll promise not to tell her about stuff too"
This line is a stroke of genius and I can't wait to see Maggie take it to the next level with Scott. She was rubbing him against her breast even before this proposal so it's clear that the only thing holding her back was the fact that Scott would alert his mother if she ever went too far with him and now this proposal ensures that won't happen.
I believe that Scott is going to be a victim of Maggie's sexual frustrations.
Thanks for reading. It's probably no secret that Maggie has some fairly inappropriate plans for Scott, though I hope the situation in which they eventually happen will be something of a suprise.
Author's Response:
[Report This]Date: October 15 2014 8:43 AM Title: Chapter 12: Exceptions to the Rules
I'll admit my heart was beating with hatred for Maggie when I started the chapter, but you couldn't possibly imagine the sense of relief that had welled over me when I finished. Thank you for letting poor Scott off softly this time around Jacksmith, but I can't help but think this little exchange of truce is a caveat of something truly horrible to come. Nice job as always.
Author's Response:
Thanks for reviewing. I do let Scott off the hook occasionally. Though I won't spoil, you're right that this is a bit of a calm before the storm.
Date: October 10 2014 1:59 PM Title: Chapter 11: Phone and Foot Tag
Well, everything Judy&Maggie do is supposed to be for his sake - to help him make amends without going to jail at least; so, yeah, why should he not trust her? (...)
Author's Response:
Hehe. Jail's starting to look awfully friendly next to this.
Date: October 10 2014 3:19 AM Title: Chapter 11: Phone and Foot Tag
You are a super talented writer. I really enjoy reading your work. Thanks for sharing your creativity!
Author's Response:
Thanks for reviewing! Glad you're enjoying.
[Report This]Date: October 09 2014 10:27 PM Title: Chapter 11: Phone and Foot Tag
Poor Scott, he should talk to Jack on how to live with bigger little sisters.
Author's Response:
Jack would probably consider what happens to Scott to be a vacation.