[Report This]Date: December 07 2014 3:03 AM Title: Chapter 21: Looking Up
Great chapter. Again I have no complaints. Just wondering if we, for the peopl who do not enjoy intimate M/m interaction if we should skip the next chapter or if it will be the same as the previous interactions with his brother.Also I fear for Libby. not that she is getting meaner, but she will do something stupid. Like stealing Scott, getting caught and being punished in Magggie's or her household. I hind of want it in that direction. Keep up the great work and cannot wait for the next chapter (unless it is an intimate interaction with M/m).
Author's Response:
Glad you liked it. There won't be any fetishized M/m situations here or in the rest of the series. And Libby may indeed try to act somehow, if not here then in a future story.
Date: December 06 2014 7:42 PM Title: Chapter 21: Looking Up
In this chapter, Maggie said something that was very interesting. She resisted making Scott bigger then 4 inches because she didn't like seeing him like this; where she can make stuff out. I think it means, somewhere in that messed up mind of hers, I think Maggie does care. She keeps Scott as small as possible so its easier to avoid thinking that he's a human being and her older brother.
I still don't know why he's relying on Maggie to get into contact with Ella. I'm sure he could reason with his mother to let him talk to her, considering how troubled the relationship is, and she appeared to like Ella in an earlier story.
At some point I hope to know what Judy is thinking of. What her long term plan is for her family. Does she really want Scott rehabilitated and a contributing member of society, or is she hoping to keeping him under her control forever? This and his previous punishments is really turning him into a mental case.
Author's Response:
Good thinking there about Maggie's view of Scott. It helps her treat him the way she does if she views him as less of a person.
You're right that it might be worth a try to ask Judy. Scott's perceptions of what's possible are just kind of warped at this point.
By the end of the story, there will definitely be some clarity on what Judy truly wants for her family.
[Report This]Date: December 06 2014 6:24 PM Title: Chapter 21: Looking Up
Ah, a school girl crush.
Part of me kind of expected Maggie to use the device on her.
Author's Response:
Hehe. That may have fit her character, though do remember that the device only works on those who have been registered, so she can only use it on Scott.
Date: November 29 2014 12:12 PM Title: Chapter 1: MVP
I bagan to hate Maggie, hope something or somebody soften her toward scott
Author's Response:
Maggie may be getting an attitude adjustment soon.
Date: November 29 2014 7:22 AM Title: Chapter 20: Putting on a Show
All hail Maggie for bringing up what he did - that was probably the single most effective thing she could say given the situation.
Yet she made *Scott* promise not to say anything, look angry, scared or whatever; even if Judy doesn't catch them in the act she'll probably ask her why she looks so (insert adjective here) - now I'm REALLY curious to see what happens next!
Author's Response:
Glad it held your interest. The next chapter will appear soon.
Date: November 29 2014 7:06 AM Title: Chapter 19: A Lick of Sense
Just a quickie: "In fact, his current appearance of spit-slogged debasement would probably prompt the girl to defend him even more ferociously to Maggie and set about cradling him in her warm palm, who no-doubt would descend into unstoppable giggles even as she willingly passed over her human chewing gum."
Either the "who" is misplaced or I have no idea how the pieces fit together; and now... NEXT CHAPTER FTW!
Author's Response:
You're right, it was just sloppy phrasing on my part. I've fixed it now.
[Report This]Date: November 26 2014 7:46 PM Title: Chapter 20: Putting on a Show
Scott gains a new friend but at what cost?
Author's Response:
AT WHAT COST!
[Report This]Date: November 26 2014 11:37 AM Title: Chapter 20: Putting on a Show
Great chapter. Again there is little to criticize about. I love how Maggie refuses to listen to Libby. I think she is actually getting annoyed with her and the peskering she is doing. She seems to want to be to soft on Scott. I know Lib has a crush on him but doesn't she understand the crime he commited. I cannot understand why she loves him so much. However I cannot wait to see where this story goes. Somehow I get the feeling Maggies isnot finished with scott yet. Keep up the great work.
Author's Response:
Bad as Scott's crime was, Libby just recognizes how positively draining the punishment is on Scott. Plus, she's liked him long enough that the crush is harder to shake. Thanks for reviewing!
[Report This]Date: November 22 2014 8:58 AM Title: Chapter 19: A Lick of Sense
This just keeps getting better and better!
Author's Response:
Thanks man.
Date: November 22 2014 7:45 AM Title: Chapter 1: MVP
I dont understand why there's the New World Order tag already, even if Shrink act law passed. PMRD use are yet limited
Author's Response:
That's a fair question. I used the tag because the law has started to fundamentally alter the justice system, and in general the public is attuned to be content with shrinking punishments, even cruel ones. That was sort of the reasoning behind it, even if the world itself hasn't had society flipped on its head (yet).
[Report This]Date: November 22 2014 3:22 AM Title: Chapter 19: A Lick of Sense
Maggie is making Carly proud wherever she is.
Author's Response:
There's no higher honor in my stories than the metaphorical approval of Carly.
[Report This]Date: November 22 2014 1:14 AM Title: Chapter 19: A Lick of Sense
If the sister doesn't get shrunk by the mom at this point life has no meaning. Lol
Gone way beyond the curious. I think punishment is in order. Even worse for lying to the mothers face. Make it so please
Author's Response:
I'm sure my hinting has made it clear that Maggie WILL shrink eventually, just not in the immediate future. Hang on to life!
[Report This]Date: November 21 2014 11:00 PM Title: Chapter 19: A Lick of Sense
Libs seems to be a welcom relief for Scott. However i donot think this will be the case. Again no mistakes in your writing. Truly a masterpiece in the works. I don't know why but Maggie seems to listen To Liby. I hopwe this doesn't effect how she treats Scott. Kepp up the great work. Cannot wait for the next chapter.
Author's Response:
Libby actually is a decent person amidst a cast of maniacial women in Scott's life. You're right that Maggie listens to Libby, partially because she thinks it's funny that the latter has a crush on Scott, but also because she's good enough friends with her that she'll listen to what she says on occasion.
[Report This]Date: November 21 2014 3:13 PM Title: Chapter 19: A Lick of Sense
Wow I've missed quite a bit lol. I'm actually intrigued by these developments. I'm patiently waiting for Judy to get back from her errands but none the less looking forward to what happens to Scott with Libby. Also the way Scott feels in the chapter is positively heartbreaking. Its almost like he's given up having a "normal" relationship with his sister. Maggie has finally broken him and made him hers.(wonder what Judy will think of that, maybe be proud lol)
I still think that his Ella meet/phone call is too good to be true, something's gonna happen to screw that up.. And that something might as well be Judy.
As far as Libby goes I dont remember much of her(was she the one at Maggie's soccer game). But she seems to mean well albeit a little jealous of Scott's girlfriend so maybe there will be some drama there..
All and all these last few chapters were great and I'm sorry I missed the live versions.
aaron
PS can't wait to see your writing when Judy comes back. Will Scott spill the beans(cause he's at the end of his rope) or will Judy discover Maggie's actions on her own? Or maybe it could somehow workout where Judy is eavesdropping on Scott's phone call to Ella and Maggie plays the whole thing aloof. That would be an interesting scenario, in my opinion.
Author's Response:
Good to hear your commentary again. You're right that there's been a certain kind of shift between Scott and Maggie here in their relationship. Scott's been fighting hard for that call to Ella, but he's been stabbed in the back many times before...
[Report This]Date: November 21 2014 11:30 AM Title: Chapter 1: MVP
You sure know how to make people wait. I'm really eager to finally see Scott meeting Ella...if he gets to at all. ;o
Author's Response:
He will see her eventually, but there may be a couple more hurdles between then and now...
[Report This]Date: November 21 2014 10:39 AM Title: Chapter 19: A Lick of Sense
I wonder if Libby will turn to the "Dark Side"? Kind of hoping she doesn't since it seems like Scott is going to have to deal with Nancy and his Mother later.
I have a theory as to who Scott saw on the TV but I don't want to spoil it if I turn out to be correct. I'm also loving these fast updates for Watch Over and Time Out 6!
Author's Response:
Libby actually is what she appears to be on the surface, which is lucky for Scott.
Thanks for reviewing. I hope to keep up this pace!
Date: November 19 2014 8:05 AM Title: Chapter 18: One Small Step for Man, One Small Bite for Maggie
Pinnacle of Maggie's cruelty? I'm really really glad to hear it!
I was thinking he should ask his brother to call Ella and tell her about the no-phone rule, but I guess it's a bit too late for that.
It's a bit weird that he lost a golden chance to delay his part of the deal: I was expecting something like "still scared from being in mommy's mouth, I may involuntarily stutter or something, give me 24h to recover" could have worked - it makes sense, increases the % of the deal being respected without accidents, and I guess Maggie would love to keep him thinking about it for hours and basically make him regret having the idea... but I guess when she wants something she just can't wait!
Author's Response:
That's not a bad idea about Kyle, since he knows Maggie can be so vindictive, but Scott's probably a little too nervous after his last encounter with his brother.
You're right that Maggie wasn't in the mood to wait; she makes him stew in anxiety often enough that this time she just went for it.
Date: November 19 2014 7:45 AM Title: Chapter 17: Unfortunate Discovery
"Scott had to blink a few times" - right after **I** had to blink a few times... I still don't know if Judy thinks Scott could break down or she just wants him to look at her for help.
The 3rd alternative, of course, being she's going to surprise all of us (again!) with whatever plan she has :)
Author's Response:
Well, Judy does like surprises...
[Report This]Date: November 17 2014 11:52 PM Title: Chapter 1: MVP
Just don't ruin maggie. I love her character's development. She is one of my all time favorites. Keep up the great work. does I just hope this doesn't mean Maggie will get nicer from what you said. I cannot wait to see where you take this series (hoping there are more sequels).
Author's Response:
There will definitely be more sequels. Maggie does have a bit of a development coming up near the end of this story, though it's not to say things are instantly going to turn sunshine-and-roses between her and Scott.
[Report This]Date: November 17 2014 8:46 PM Title: Chapter 18: One Small Step for Man, One Small Bite for Maggie
Gosh, neither of them are getting away with this lightly, are they? This whole chapter just lights up signals for a harsh punishment.
Nonconsentual mouthplay isnt very high on my list of favorite interactions, but you've done it very well.
Maggie's raw sadism makes my stomach churn like no other character, so I wouldn't mind her getting the short end of the deal this time. Really, I wouldn't mind at all.
For better or worse, I'm looking forward to a change in character. I'm not sure if my weak heart can take much more of Scott's suffering.
Author's Response:
Thanks for reading. I definitely intended for this chapter to feel like a pinnacle for Maggie's cruelty in terms of her sadism being at an all-time high, though there is a bit of a silver lining coming up soon for Scott, if that's any consolation.