[Report This]Date: December 27 2014 2:25 PM Title: Chapter 25: Family Politics
Not miffed about the Nancy situation because I know she'll get her moment in the sun.
But the reason why Judy's been so nice to Scott finally makes sense. She's been manipulating him so that he doesn't embarrass her or cause problems for her campaign at this garden party. She's just telling him what he wants to hear to pacify him. I still wasn't convinced until she said she'd "look the other way" for any of his transgressions from now on as long as he does this for her... She's doing a masterful manipulation job on her son. I'm loving ever minute of it and can't wait for the other shoe to fall.
aaron
PS really getting into this story more and more with each passing chapter. Well done.
Author's Response:
You're definitely on the right track about Judy's motivations. And even though she's seemingly laying it on the line here, there are still things she's not bringing up yet that may come to light soon. Thanks for reviewing.
[Report This]Date: December 24 2014 1:28 AM Title: Chapter 24: Frisky Business
The anticipation is killing me. Can't wait for that garden party and those "little surprises" that Nancy promised. Thinking Judy will be dressed to kill(not literally of course... Although).
Is this some kind of campaigning benefit dinner? If so where's Judy's husband?(or is she even married)
Great setup too. Nancy is the textbook definition of a cougar lol.
aaron
PS Merry Christmas
Author's Response:
Thanks for reviewing, and merry christmas to you too. It's a party to help suck up to Judy's financial backers for her upcoming campaign. Judy is not married, though she used to be.
Date: December 23 2014 3:23 AM Title: Chapter 1: MVP
Amazing work as always Jack. Keep it up. This and Julia are my main insperasaions!!
off topic though but when will we see the final act of Julia begin?
Author's Response:
Thanks much. I'm still not sure when Act 4 is coming, but it probably won't be until after this story and a couple others are finished.
[Report This]Date: December 22 2014 6:06 PM Title: Chapter 24: Frisky Business
Ah that whacky Nancy with all her naughtiness and her um...nice feet.
Author's Response:
Those two traits seem to go hand in hand around here, don't they?
[Report This]Date: December 22 2014 6:06 PM Title: Chapter 24: Frisky Business
Great chapter. Love the reintroduction of Nancy. I wonder how far she will go before Scott is thought more for her pleasure. Somehow I think Nancy has an even dirtier mind than Judy and Maggie combined. On the critiques I have none. The spelling and grammar is perfect. The flow of the story is flawless, from what I can tell. Keep up the great work. Cannot wait for the next chapter. I know there are only a few chapter left in this installment but I hope this series continues. I love the Idea you have developed here and I really like the characters especially Judy, Maggie and Nancy.
Author's Response:
That tipping point for how Nancy views Scott is probably coming very soon. And I'd say you're right about who's got the dirtiest mind here, though of course that doesn't necessarily make her the biggest threat to Scott. I will definitely continue with these characters after this story ends. Thanks for reading!
[Report This]Date: December 22 2014 5:40 PM Title: Chapter 24: Frisky Business
Hmmm. Things just got a little more interesting.
Author's Response:
Thanks for reviewing!
[Report This]Date: December 22 2014 5:29 PM Title: Chapter 24: Frisky Business
Holy crap! I don't want to wait too long to see what happens!
Author's Response:
Neither does Nancy. ;)
[Report This]Date: December 19 2014 8:51 AM Title: Chapter 23: Tied Up at the Moment
Five episodes of Gossip Girl... "mild"? :)
I was thinking that part of the reason she's behaving like that is that finding out what he did must have hurt her, and she either wants to hurt him back or at least not show any sign of weakness in front of him - but riczar's theory is better.
(Time to replace "think of Ella" with "tell her about the no-phone rule")
Author's Response:
Well, maybe "mild" compared to the alternative games Maggie could've enacted.
Who says Maggie's behavior can't be a mix of several reasons? ;)
Date: December 19 2014 7:20 AM Title: Chapter 21: Looking Up
I can't take my mind off "Then I'll huff, and I'll puff..." - my 1st exercise in "listening comprehension" was listen to the story and write down every word; it took forever, and I still remember many parts of it by heart.
Pretend this is a serious, thoughtful comment :-"
Author's Response:
I always appreciate your serious literary critiques.
Date: December 19 2014 6:22 AM Title: Chapter 23: Tied Up at the Moment
Well Maggie kept her promise for once! Plus she didn't molest scott ... yet! she was being nice! but it must be"calm before storm". Ella want to clear thing up!!? not looking good for Scott!
Author's Response:
Scott definitely has reason to feel nervous at this point.
[Report This]Date: December 18 2014 9:11 PM Title: Chapter 23: Tied Up at the Moment
Maggie is somewhat softening...but this is a Jacksmith sister...what is a guy to do with his assumptions...read more...OK!
Author's Response:
Hehe... who knows, I may break my own stereotype just this one time? ;)
[Report This]Date: December 18 2014 4:31 PM Title: Chapter 23: Tied Up at the Moment
Great chapter, Im starting to see a change with Maggie. I just hope this doesn't end the interactions between them. I hope she gets more "daring" and decide to try other things. I still like her other personality better but depeding on how she changes and where you take it I could see myself liking this Maggie too. I just dont want to be " I care too much for Scott", or "Your my boyfriend now,scott" or something bizarre like that. Again I could find no mistakes in your writing. You deliver great stories. Keep up the great work; cannot wait for the next chapter.
Author's Response:
Maggie doesn't have any plans to cease interaction with Scott, even if she's starting to change. You definitely won't see a twisted romance of some kind forming between them though. Thanks for the read/review.
[Report This]Date: December 18 2014 2:04 PM Title: Chapter 23: Tied Up at the Moment
Great chapter. Scott and Ella will finally meet, Maggie permitting of course. But this is actually better news for Maggie, now she can do whatever she wants like maybe an intimate shower or she could be merciful. The ball is entirely in her court lol. And I'm looking forward to see how she handles this without Judy knowing. Speaking of Judy a garden party... Sounds even better than that book club and I can't wait.
aaron
PS the way Ella was speaking it sounded like she'd enjoy having Scott back at his tiny size.
Also, I've always been curious about this, what shoe size is Ella? I only ask because when she had Scott in Judy's size 12 pump it didn't seem too big for her, the shoe seemed like a perfect fit.
Author's Response:
You're right that Maggie's still in control of the situation, so Scott even now may not be quite off the hook.
Honestly I haven't thought of a shoe size for Ella. She's a smaller size than Judy, though obviously not by so much that her foot was noticeably dwarfed by the pump.
Date: December 13 2014 6:13 AM Title: Chapter 1: MVP
don't zephilla, I highly doubt Maggie turn from current state to 'gentle' one like Libby!
[Report This]Date: December 13 2014 12:21 AM Title: Chapter 22: Silver Linings
God I love Maggie.
Author's Response:
And who wouldn't (besides Scott)
Date: December 12 2014 4:23 PM Title: Chapter 1: MVP
Thank you, jack. Meanwhile I just the revealing chapter 'breaking amends'
Author's Response:
That's a good chapter to get you caught up.
Date: December 12 2014 12:08 PM Title: Chapter 1: MVP
Do u want me to read the whole last story to find out Kyle's Grugde vs Scott?!Seriously Come on , it's easy to tell me what was about directly!Ok, as I just read 1st chapter of last story, I guess driving drunk, Right?
Author's Response:
I invite you to read it if you want, though I really do try to write these stories so readers can basically follow what happens without seeing the others. You're right about the reason for Kyle's grudge.
[Report This]Date: December 12 2014 12:07 PM Title: Chapter 22: Silver Linings
Nice new be mad at have a feeling that Ella is going to be mad at Scott for his DWI and Hurting that lady. I also hope that it gets taken up a notch. Like Judy finding out that Scott called Ella and he recieves a harsh punishment. Cannot wait to se where you take this story. Also I hope the change in Maggie is not drastic enough for us to be like really that was a bug change. I love her personality and yes she could change I just hope it not big. As for grammar/spelling no mistakes that I see. Keep up the great work.
Author's Response:
Thanks for reading. Judy does indeed have some unpleasant plans for Scott before this story ends, though I won't say more than that for now. I'm not sure I can make any promises about Maggie, though. ;)
Date: December 12 2014 10:55 AM Title: Chapter 1: MVP
I didn't get why Scott said sorry to Kyle. Excuse me I didn't reed previous 'time-out'. Did Maggie ajustment attitude start now by making this call? Or It"s gonna happens in Time out 7?
Author's Response:
Kyle's still holding a grudge for Scott's crime in the last story; that's really all the context you need here. Maggie's not changing her tune yet. There are still 9 chapters left to go in this one.
[Report This]Date: December 07 2014 8:09 PM Title: Chapter 21: Looking Up
Another great chapter and i hope we see more of libby soon, I'm starting to like her and Scott as a paring. It's also starting to seem like she's planning on taking Scott away from there. Or at least she's thinking it.
Author's Response:
Thanks! Libby probably has considered the possibility of trying to save Scott, though she's also aware that there are a limited number of people that want to help him, so she'd be more easily incriminated.