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Reviewer: Amateur Wordsmith Signed [Report This]
Date: June 26 2014 10:42 AM Title: The beginning

For your convenience, here is your story when properly formatted. I also fixed some grammar for you as you mentioned you were not the best at english.

 

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Christi had worked very late that fateful night. She was on the final push for her project that she has been working on secretly. She called it "The reclaimer"; adevice that could make atoms expand or collapse depending on what setting it was on. She was so excited to finally get her revenge on all the men, she hated men, after leaving her now ex-husband left her with a child.

As she screws in the last piece she is shaking from anticipation. "It's finally done" she sighs in relief; this has been her pride and joy for the last year and half.

Christi grabs the device, leaves the lab, and heads home. She walked in and tried to move without her daughter hearing. She quickly gets to her room and falls asleep because she's been on caffeine finishing her project for that last few days.

A few hours later Amber wakes up about to get ready for school, she notices her moms sedan is in the driveway she goes to make sure she is actually home. She walks in the room and sees her mom sleeping sounder then she has in years. Amber looks over next to her moms bed and see what looks like a board with dials on it. She grabs it and sees the scale "Large" on a button and "small" on another.
 

Without thinking Christi points the device toward herself and hits "small", she starts shrinking until she stopped holding the button. She looked upon the floor that seems to stretch for miles, she looked down at the device and it said "3 inches". She went from 5'6" to 3" in about 30 seconds.

She realized she shrank out of her clothes and quickly became embarrassed, "I'm 3 inches tall and in my house, now one will see me anyway" and she wasn't very embarrassed anymore.

She put the device on "Large" and grew back to 5'6" and quickly put her clothes on. "Should I take this with me?" She wondered. "I could have a lot of fun with this" said Amber who finished getting ready and left the house.

"I can't go to school now, I have more important things to do". She said making her way to her boyfriend Luke's house.

She knocked on the door and Luke opened it. "I'm about to leave for school, what are you doing her?" Luke questioned.

"I found something amazing that we need to try right now..." stated Amber firmly.

"Okay come on in sweetheart." Luke whispered.

They made there way to Luke's room and he locked the door. "Okay what are we doing that's more important then my education." Luke said jokingly.

"You're going to be my slave" Amber said calmly.

"Excuse me?" Luke replied, but Before he could say another word he shrank to 1/2 in" tall.

"Perfect." Amber sighed.

She picked him up off the ground and dropped him down on her pubes. Amber had a C-cup and flowing red hair. Luke was deep inside her pubes and it made amber very horny.

She grabs the device and hits "Large". She starts growing and hits the ceiling and it starts to crumble. She holds the button down harder and breaks through the roof of Luke's house. She is now 200ft tall and extremely horny. She starts to rub her clit and grows to 500ft. She reaches 1,000ft and began to cum.

Reviewer: Amateur Wordsmith Signed [Report This]
Date: June 26 2014 10:31 AM Title: The beginning

Good start, but it needs work.

I would recommend first of all making it longer. You never really talked much about the characters personalities. You should also expand on the setting a little. An important aspect of all giantess stories is the situation.

Secondly, it is standard practice for any author to start a new paragraph everytime you switch speakers.

Lastly, you should try and use more descriptive vocabulary in future updates. Describing a character involves more than just visuals, you need to also think in terms of the other senses as well.

 

 



Author's Response: Okay thank you, also the story isn't over yet I plan on adding more on very soon...I'll try to be more descriptive

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