Date: August 07 2014 7:40 AM Title: Chapter 12
Alright, I'll admit my mistake on saying the magic came out of nowhere. I'm not here to bash you on foreshadowing, as I understand it's a hard skill to master, but the only real hint to the supernatural was the fact that his voice projects louder than it should. Objects appearing out of nowhere with no explanation do not 'hint' at anything. You even said yourself in chapter fourteen that the research was without results. I am simply putting it out there that your big magic reveal could have been better prepared for. Besides this, I'll say that I have enjoyed the other chapters a lot. Is the story any close to concluding after the big reveal?
Author's Response:
It's cool, let me try and explain myself though.
Not only did I say his voice is louder but he can't be heard by anyone outside of his friends group. This was evidenced by the fact that a complete stranger couldn't hear him yell back in the book store even though they were closer to him than Tara, who heard him clearly. Objects appearing out of thin air definitely hints at some supernatural force at work, unless you can think of something else that could hint to.
And to be perfectly honest I knew this was going to turn out to be pretty stupid. Even as I wrote the chapter out I kept picturing someone reading this and thinking: "well that sure makes a lot of fucking sense". But at this point I was already too committed to the whole magical explanation. So I decided to try and make it as entertaining of a back story as I could, incorporating history as well as legends. Maybe it's not good but hey, A for creativity.
And yes the story will be wrapping up soon.
[Report This]Date: July 24 2014 4:36 PM Title: Chapter 12
In the immortal words of Arte Johnson:
"Veeeeeeeeeeeeeery interestink!"
Date: July 24 2014 11:07 AM Title: Chapter 12
intresting. the girls can hear him no problem, but other people can not.