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Reviewer: aaron Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: May 27 2014 9:10 AM Title: Chapter 3 - Closed Hearts Open

This is fantastic. Exactly the kind of story I like. Cannot wait to see what happens next.

aaron
PS love the burgundy toenails.

Reviewer: Nostory Signed [Report This]
Date: May 27 2014 1:08 AM Title: Chapter 3 - Closed Hearts Open

Wow twice in one chapter but surely he'll want to get his size back. Now that's something I want to see.

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Date: May 26 2014 10:18 PM Title: Chapter 2 - A Shocking Discovery

I like what I am reading so far, lets see how long Carlos will last before he shrinks again.

Reviewer: vgiv Signed [Report This]
Date: May 26 2014 9:33 PM Title: Chapter 1 An Angry Man

While I do like the plot, I had a hard time deciphering what anybody looked like, what they're rank was, and the chapter was very long, so at the end I was sorta forcing myself to read. I do however like if not love the interaction and conversation. You are able to mix physical interaction with vocal action very easily, better than what I could do early in my time on the site.

You show promise, welcome to the site! I do hope this story, which is already interesting, will be continued.

P.S, this seems a bit to good for a first time writer, is this you're first time writing? It does not seem so.



Author's Response:

Thanks for the feedback. I started this story about 2 years ago. It is my first time writing, so your points are welcome. I have a little over 125,000 words written in 2 parts. I will break up the chapters to a bit smaller chunks.

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