Date: April 26 2015 5:19 PM Title: Chapter 5
I hope that someday soon, you will update the English version of this story to bring it up to the status of your French version. It's a very enjoyable story, and I'm sure that the remaining chapters will be equally enjoyable. Unfortunately, my French is insufficient to read in that language.
Author's Response:
Thanks but don't worry about the French version containing more content than the English version. I can't read or write a word of French. Dood07 was generous enough to translate the story and unless he added more material they have the same amount of content. However, with the release of http://g.e-hentai.org/g/841400/91bc85c725/ I am feeling very tempted to add more to the story. After all it was the original hentai and my friend Max, an absoprtion fan, who inspired the first 60 pages.
[Report This]Date: May 27 2014 10:25 PM Title: Chapter 5
I loved every bit of this story. It took me a while get through it. Some chapters took me several sittings to read through. But I never felt it dragged on longer than it needed to. I actually liked how you handled the fights, doing mostly recaps of the important parts.
Julia went from being a noble duelist facing other witches in battle, kind of like High-Lander, as much as I'm familiar with that. She than became a predator, hunting and stealing other witch's magic. And finally, a noble soul, countering the actions of evil witches in the world. (Though it almost looked like she was ready to turn to the dark side in Brexington at the drive through.)
I thought John adapted a bit too fast in the beginning. The story kind of glosses his coping with the lost of his old life. Julia spent more time agonizing over it. Still I'm happy for him and Julia.
I loved the bits with Rina and her continuous quest for equal attention in all things.
It's a shame the story ends just a major opponent appears. I kept looking for the double-cross with Sharon, especially when she started talking about puppets. I expected a supper powerful witch to spring a trap or Lina's mind controlled true witch partner to appear, but relaxed when the transfer went through. Then bam, you hit us with the twist at the end. (Though wouldn't Lina know what Sharon was up to?) If you ever extend this story, I wonder if they might find Sharon has contracted with Rina's mother.
Author's Response:
I'm glad that you enjoyed it. For me this story didn't seem like the type to have long battles descibed yet I didn't want to make it seem like a light matter. So going over the damage done to her after the battle and a few of the high notes seemed like a good way to handle it. It seems to have worked.
John didn't help her much at that moment but then again he made it pretty clear he hated that city. Of course. Even if Julia gets angry enough to use her magic against someone it doesn't mean she's going to go for their life.
True but I wanted to keep this story relatively short. That John and Julia are good friends I believe helps explain things plus I imagined John as very quick to adapt to new situation. I didn't want him to be the type to sulk about things that can't be helped or do something foolish.
Rina was fun to write about
A witch's familiar only knows what the witch is planning when it involves breaking the rules. So she knew when Sharon decided not to hunt other witches but not why not to hunt other witches. I don't believe Sharon or Julia would ever be enemies. Sharon was there to show that Julia isn't the only very cunning witch. I believe they're also cunning enough to realize they're plenty of weaker witches out there and going after one another would be counter productive. Each one see the other as too dangerous. As for if Sharon's plan worked that's unknown.
[Report This]Date: May 25 2014 8:41 AM Title: Chapter 5
Sharron was looking at the big picture.
Really enjoying the relationship between John and Julie as well as Rina. Rina is a awesome clueless soul, which that what I like.
Can't wait for more.
Author's Response:
That could be a very long wait. For the time being the story is considered finished. I'm glad that you enjoyed it though. This story was my attempt to show the type of relationship I'd like to have with a giantess as a shrunken man and I believe I succeeded rather well. I'm glad other people have enjoyed it as well.
[Report This]Date: May 24 2014 6:06 PM Title: Chapter 5
This doesn't feel like a complete story. It feels like Act One, at most. You've set up a lot of intriguing plots without resolving anything, or even exploring their possibilities. You mentioned becoming a Resonance, and have barely even begun her quest to achieve that. This has all sorts of story potential - getting there and what Julia does once she's there could be several stories. At the end, you mentioned that Sharon has a scheme that could spawn an entire story on its own. I recommend that you make this the introduction to a series - I find your universe intriguing, and this part is well written. I'd like to see more.
I found the chapters too long. For me, the sweet spot is about 7000 words.
Author's Response:
I like to end things on a high hope point typically. The future looks bright but not everything is resolved. It is possible that I'll pick this story up in the future but not for the time being. Right now it's part of my short stories collection. I like to focus on one giantess story and one super fem story at a time occationally deviating to a side story. We'll see what happens once I finish my two main focuses but that won't be for a while. Though my current main focuses were short stories at one time.
I know the length chases away some readers but when it comes to the length I write as long as it takes for me to reach a comfortable leaving off point. I find that setting some artificial stopping point degrades the quality of the story as I struggle to fit things in or leave out details. Plus when i wrote this I was feeling really inspired. After seeing a manga with some wonderful sexual mouth play I just had to come up with a way for a gentle lady and guy to have some naughty fun.
Thanks for reading and reviewing.