Date: July 04 2014 8:58 AM Title: Chapter 1
Great work as always!
[Report This]Date: May 23 2014 10:30 PM Title: Chapter 1
So far I do like the concept of becoming more powerful through absorption. There were way too many comics and shows where the main antagonist gained power by absorbing the heroes love interest like that one old show (Which sickened me to the point of ripping out my hair). Kind of hope you can actually sell the story to a studio or something because it feels like it should spread further then just this site.
I do find it hard sometimes to confirm who's speaking and find myself re-reading the same line a couple of times just to verify the speaker. There were also a few spots such as he/she were mixed up on small occassions. Others have stated the lack of a solid conflict so I won't add to it.
A plot error I am a little confused about is the concept about a Bane and magic. Witches defeat another and grow in size and power to become something far greater and a Bane is more like a person who is born to destroy witches and magic. I understand that John is not trained but how can a shrinking spell work fully when other magic seems to be in effective?
By chapter five however there were too many things set up to end it here. Not certain if you plan to continue as you seem to be juggling between several stories at once.
Author's Response:
When a paragraph includes action and speaking the person performing the action is the speaker, if their name appears just before the spoken word with no action or "" then that person is speaking otherwise if just two people are speaking the speaker alternates between spaces. I find that if I name the speaker before every statement it over saturates things.
As for a Bane. A Bane is not resistant to all magic. Julia says it in the story.
“John you're a witches bane. At least that's our word for you. It means you're a human who's mind is resistant to magic and you can do other things as well. You also have the ability to sense a witch. Remember how you could always track me down in the hospital? I just thought you knew me really well but now I'm sure there was more to it. We call you that because such humans were the death of many witches in the past.”
A Bane is someone who's mind is resistent to magic so they notice when a person suddenly changes due to defeating or being defeated by another witch. A witch can't read their intentions or even feel their emotions so they're rather stealthy to a witch while they on the other hand can feel a witch's presence and even track them over long distances. If you recall from the story Bane's rely upon going undetected and stealth attacks to kill a witch. When a Bane kills a witch either the fight is over before the witch knows she's fighting otherwise the Bane dies instead in the vast majority of cases.
[Report This]Date: May 23 2014 9:48 AM Title: Chapter 1
This is a great story! One of your other stories "The Inescapable Guardian" is one of my all time favorites. You seemed to imply there that there might be more of that story coming, as you labeled it Book One. I'd certainly like to see more of that, or maybe with some of the other giantesses that were introduced. And I'd definately like to see you continue this story. I love gentle/maternal stories, but everything is going too well, I'm sure there's some conflict upcoming, if it were continued. If you won't continue any of the above stories, then I'd like to see more in the same vein as them.
Author's Response:
Thanks. I'm afraid Lucy in the Inescapable Guardian fell out of interest for me due to her ethical failings. It's not a story I would be interested in continuing. You might like the story I'm currently working on. The giantesses of the story actually have a need for companionship. They enjoy a significant high whenever they're interacting with and nurturing another. This doesn't work amongst their own kind as they don't need one another the way one of the more fragile races do.
You may also like A Nurturing Heat if you haven't read it already. It's just a 12 page little short but the mini giantess in it is the carying type.
[Report This]Date: May 22 2014 9:50 PM Title: Chapter 1
Glad to you back writing really long stories. Like one of my all time favorite "Kate."
Most of my questions got answered during that chapter. On to the next four.
Date: May 22 2014 3:47 PM Title: Chapter 1
Looks super interesting, you have my attention.
Author's Response:
I'm glad you enjoyed it. Though the five chapters that are up are the complete story. At least they are for the foreseeable future. If you're not that far in I hope you enjoy the coming events.