Reviewer: Kaneda Signed [Report This]
Date: May 19 2014 6:47 AM Title: Chapter 2

It's a little bit of a stretch to see Laurel going after her family and friends in this moment, but I feel like it's still believable to a point.  She's been shattered, having everything in her personal and professional life taken from her in a single moment and is on her way to becoming a fugitive for perhaps the rest of her life.  The one bright spot in this metaphorical dark hole she finds herself in is the utterly exhilirating power she experienced when she had a tiny, helpless man at her feet.

 

Laurel has experienced a life of powerlessness, taught to do her best and try hard and things would work out.  I imagined and tried to portray her family as idealistic upper-middle class suburbanites, and for Laurel, who wants to feel good in the only way she knows how right now, they are both the most available and vulnerable people to her as well as the people that she can most easily blame for filling her with hope and sunshine in a world where reality is cold and dark and cruel.

 

I may not have expressed this as clearly as I wanted to in the story, but hopefully you can see my intentions as you continue to read.  I hope you continue to enjoy the story as I post the remaining segments, and thank you for reading!

 

~K