Date: April 11 2018 2:09 PM Title: Chapter 38
I do hope there'll be more!!
Date: January 07 2018 7:52 AM Title: Chapter 38
Will you ever continue writing this or will it join evolution of mice in its tomb of forgotten stories?
Author's Response:
I'll continue. Writing my thesis right now, so I ain't got time for anything. Sorry.
Date: October 30 2017 1:47 PM Title: Chapter 38
@Simpson3k I have to disagree with Janna and Laura's rampages being dull but that's just my opinion ;) I find the girls cruelty disturbingly sexy but I do see what you mean about them needing to meet their match. Thank you for writing this amazing story. I could only fanthom the hard work and dedication you put into all of your chapters. Keep up the excellent work.
[Report This]Date: October 26 2017 1:15 PM Title: Chapter 38
Wow, so far a really great story just as evolution of mice a really big project. Only two things i really found disturbing yet everything else was just brilliant.
First that souther arab girl in that viking city, you tell her background origin over almost a whole chapter and then "slurp" and she is gone. I really thought she would have some more impact and apear more often like Dari so so but .. no the whole of her whereabout didnt matter in the least. Basicly following that logic you would have to write a least a line for every single person those two girls did crush since ariving on saturn seven and that would mean to almost write a story of its own XD
And second well even though its probably part of the general story setting "two giga sized girls arrive on tiny world" I something just hope that they get teleported to some pocket dimension to one of the twelve deities shrunken to an inch and tortured in the same way they torture everybody around them only because they can do it. It kind of becoming dull, no? Like they can do whatever they want and reallly having no consquences to fear. Did they forget that they almost starved to death and only didnt because general lee started a whole food caravan only for them?
If they would keep eating everybody on that world they would at some point be alone nobody farming or hunting food for them no allies only victims nobdody who would help them. I had the impression they both are some kind of scientists in that spaceship on a science mission but at this point they only apear like two blond it girl super models with hay in their head only eating, sleeping and fapping. Its ok when thats intended but i often really wished they would hit a wall somehow, encountering somebody who gives them a real challenge, a risk for death.
Author's Response:
The slave prostitute in Thorwal was a prop to show how large and different the world still is. I really liked her in the beginning and I was going to let her live, but her storyline just went where it went.
The other thing is really important and I'm constantly looking for things that can challenge them. There are a few things still, if you have been reading closely, and that's going come up again eventually. Also, keep in mind: Janna and Laura are not scientists but failing students. They are trying desperately to apply what they have learned, sometimes really, really wrongly, but constantly falling victims to their own shortcomings.
New chapter will be up in the next few days. Thanks a lot for your comment.