Date: February 12 2017 3:41 PM Title: Chapter 27
It's hard to pity Nagash considering the start of this chapter. But I can't help thinking that if Daisy had lived she would've been a positive influence on the giantess.
As it is I agree with your reasons for not showing Nagash's death, which definitely enhanced the storytelling. In fact I'd say this was probably the best written chapter yet. I particuarly liked the phrase "chalk off a stone", if that's something you made up it.
The only issue is that I'm not sure there was really any justification for why Dari would bother to save Thorsten and Léon, given the additional risk involved.
I liked the new character Egon though, which I assume means he's got a painful death waiting for him. I can only hope the same is true of Steve, as I share Dari's view of the two Earthlings.
Author's Response:
I probably should have explained that. The idea was to use Thorgun's and Leon's status to make saving Christina and Steve, both unimportant to the Andergastians, believable. Slipping them by while their captors were still stunned by the realization over what they had. They were a means to minimize the risk, not a purpose in and of their own. It failed to sufficiently fool the priest but luckily Egon was there, making something up out of thin air, using the queer spacesuits the earthlings are wearing. Without the setup of Leon and Thorsten it might not have worked in fact. Also, Dari saved Leon and Thorsten before, and her original motives still stand to some extend.
I like Egon too, though he's really getting it on with the wrong girl. Thank you so much.
Date: February 11 2017 3:19 PM Title: Chapter 27
Wow! I can't believe it. Another update. :D
Okay, I'm happy.. very happy to see that Dari, Steve and Christina are still alive.. for now.. XD
I really didn't expected to see Lauraville conquered and Nagash dead without "seeing" it happen. Now it seems it's time for the two mighty giantesses to come back home, but I guess there are still some more things that have to happen before that.
I'm not sure that revealing the truth about Steve and Christina to such a weak man was a good idea.. I have the feeling that when the two ladies will come back, it will end with the Andergastian trying to use them as human-shields.
Finally, I am really curious so see which role Hafthor and Lèon will have in the forthcoming chapters.
PS: Thank you so much for this masterpiece. :)
Author's Response:
Thank you so much for your reviews, they're always wonderful. :) It means a lot, it really does.
The whole conquest thing happened to spice things up and make it easier. Think about what might have happened if they hadn't come. Then Dari would have had to leave Lauraville and hike through the forest without any idea where to look. Not good reading. Perhaps if Nagash hadn't abused her and they would have killed Stonetree and Bruin together, but then Dari would still have to take Vengyrs body and leave Lauraville far enough so that Xardas could appear according to plan. Boring. You can't finalize a plotline by having everything play out exactly as you were hinting it would in the story. To do that would be to be predictable and being predictable is dull, a thing creators of comics might do well to remember as well ;)
As for Nagash's death, well, it would have been quite mundane. Village is attacked, men scream, she curses and crushes people, they feather her with arrows but it's not enough and they finally slay her from up close. Exactly what you would expect. By keeping her death a secret, I tried to build more on what Dari felt like as she slowly discovers how the village has changed over night. It doesn't come out as much as I wanted it too because I do not have enough time to write those 30k words chapters anymore, but that was the way I intended it.
I'm currently a little conflicted over how much to explain and how much to leave open to interpretation. The reviews tell me that people can follow the plots fine and get subtle hints and all that, but sometimes while I'm writing I'm thinking there should be shed a little more light on the background here or there. On the other hand, a story that doesn't make people think and explains every detail easily becomes literature for children. Not good.
What will happen to Lauraville, Léon and Thorsten before Janna and Laura return I have no idea what so ever. We will see. I noticed I made a mistake though, I wrote Thorgun instead of Thorsten while I was still feverish from the last chapter. You should point those things out to me, any errors, please!
Thanks again for your great reviewing routine!