[Report This]Date: July 23 2016 5:37 PM Title: Chapter 13
I've been keeping up with this story for a while and this chapter was easily my favorite yet. We're getting pretty deep into this fascinating world you've built, I'm excited to see how far you can take it. This is definitely one of the most creative and imaginative works I've stumbled across on this site. Thanks for your effort!
[Report This]Date: June 08 2016 7:04 PM Title: Chapter 13
Lots of world building here, which is still a very significant plus compared to most stories I've read. Details and a well done style, though there are a few minor spelling errors here and there.
The two main characters finally meet resistance with seige machines, though Janna seemed to be able to start making short work of them as soon as she was close enough.
This chapter did well with remarking about how the two main characters are so resistant to everything, but it is interesting to note that they are scared of seige machines. Having something that they actually have trouble defeating besides their own hunger makes them a lot more interesting, though in all likelihood they will probably not have much trouble taking down a tower if they actually grit their teeth and went all the way.
[Report This]Date: March 16 2016 3:59 PM Title: Chapter 13
I'm really glad you came back to this. I'm curious to see where it goes now that they are scared to be hurt. The, "she just left" excuse seemed kinda weak but, overall thanks for coming back :)
Date: March 15 2016 6:59 AM Title: Chapter 13
Danny Furio made it out alive by a hairs width. It seems the only way to deal with Jenna and Laura is with bewitching spells instead of direct damage. I'm also glad that these two were caught off guard and had to run like cowards, it's the least that can happen to them after all the pointless death and suffering they've caused.