Date: June 19 2018 7:39 AM Title: Chapter 3
Hey dude idk why but i really want Marvin the hunter to return. I really liked him and felt it was unfair what happened to him. I hoped when she felt movement it was a goddess or something rescuing him. Ill need you to go ahead and tell me it aint gonna happen so i dont get let down lol Or if jenna at least finds out he wasent a bad dude
Haha, welcome to the story.
Date: October 30 2017 1:47 PM Title: Chapter 38
@Simpson3k I have to disagree with Janna and Laura's rampages being dull but that's just my opinion ;) I find the girls cruelty disturbingly sexy but I do see what you mean about them needing to meet their match. Thank you for writing this amazing story. I could only fanthom the hard work and dedication you put into all of your chapters. Keep up the excellent work.
Date: October 26 2017 1:15 PM Title: Chapter 38
Wow, so far a really great story just as evolution of mice a really big project. Only two things i really found disturbing yet everything else was just brilliant.
First that souther arab girl in that viking city, you tell her background origin over almost a whole chapter and then "slurp" and she is gone. I really thought she would have some more impact and apear more often like Dari so so but .. no the whole of her whereabout didnt matter in the least. Basicly following that logic you would have to write a least a line for every single person those two girls did crush since ariving on saturn seven and that would mean to almost write a story of its own XD
And second well even though its probably part of the general story setting "two giga sized girls arrive on tiny world" I something just hope that they get teleported to some pocket dimension to one of the twelve deities shrunken to an inch and tortured in the same way they torture everybody around them only because they can do it. It kind of becoming dull, no? Like they can do whatever they want and reallly having no consquences to fear. Did they forget that they almost starved to death and only didnt because general lee started a whole food caravan only for them?
If they would keep eating everybody on that world they would at some point be alone nobody farming or hunting food for them no allies only victims nobdody who would help them. I had the impression they both are some kind of scientists in that spaceship on a science mission but at this point they only apear like two blond it girl super models with hay in their head only eating, sleeping and fapping. Its ok when thats intended but i often really wished they would hit a wall somehow, encountering somebody who gives them a real challenge, a risk for death.
The slave prostitute in Thorwal was a prop to show how large and different the world still is. I really liked her in the beginning and I was going to let her live, but her storyline just went where it went.
The other thing is really important and I'm constantly looking for things that can challenge them. There are a few things still, if you have been reading closely, and that's going come up again eventually. Also, keep in mind: Janna and Laura are not scientists but failing students. They are trying desperately to apply what they have learned, sometimes really, really wrongly, but constantly falling victims to their own shortcomings.
New chapter will be up in the next few days. Thanks a lot for your comment.
Date: April 07 2017 4:17 PM Title: Chapter 34
What a fun story (still). I find myself going back and reading chapters and realizing something new every time (guess I should be taking notes). I'm interested to see what the end game of the story is. Do Janna and Laura live in this place forever? Do they find a way to get home? Are they still big? Will other people come looking for them? All questions in the back of my mind while reading.
Those questions will really only be answered twoards the end of the story, I think. It's still a long way there.
Date: March 17 2017 11:01 AM Title: Prologue
I gotta agree with geeman. Janna and Laura are so cruel, it literally scares me and makes me despise them and yet at the same time, their both so sexy and yes, the things they do are completely messesd up but its so hot much to my guilty pleasure that actually I look forward to these two sadistic titanesses doing their malicious acts. The fact that you make their dialogue so real and believable only scares me more lol. Hell I even had a nightmare/good dream? about Janna destroying a city once. For you to make me have mix feelings like that shows what a talented writer you truly are!!!
Date: March 16 2017 3:39 PM Title: Chapter 32
Nice chapter! I'm glad to see how far they're being pushed, by something as simple as not having enough food. It's realistic. These two aren't god's, just two skanks that happen to be huge. How many times have they wasted food? Squishing people, killing them in their sexy time? I understand the need to eat people, they need to survive, but everything else they do with the tiniest is just a waste.
If they'd eaten all the villagers instead of squishing them they prolly wouldn't be hungry right now. I wonder if they'll reflect on that?...who am I kidding, these two bimbos don't reflect on squat. Anyways as usual, I enjoy seeing them miserable yadda yadda. And again, despite my dislike for most characters in this story I do actually enjoy it. It's like game of thrones, almost all the characters are unlikable pieces of trash but it's enjoyable watching them interact with one another, trying to screw each other over, etc.
Date: March 13 2017 7:53 AM Title: Chapter 31
Fantastic work as always. These last couple of chapters have been great.
Although their personalities are different both girls seem to be getting ever more sadistic, with no anchor amongst the tinies for Laura and only Furio for Janna.
The mystery over their "deaths" at the beginning works very well to raise tension, and I very much liked Furio's diary entry at the end - which works a lot better in PDF format.
BTW, do you prefer comments here or on your Patreon?
Anywhere is perfect. You're right, PDF allows for more creativity. I ought to thank lfcan for making me do that. Perhaps Deviant art would be best for comments, encurage more people to read and comment as well and get a ball rolling there. Patreon falls woefully short of being a good platform for distribution.
You're also right about Laura and Janna, but don't forget that they are at war and fed up with Thorwal, Janna in any case, as am I, and Horas promises to be different, if it turns out the way Janna envisions. There's a million reasons why it shouldn't and I don't know yet what Scalia's plan is, what the Horasian nobolity will do, the churches, the tradehouses and Gareth. Will be a lot of fun figuring that out though.
Date: March 11 2017 4:09 PM Title: Chapter 30
So the two split up again eh? As usual, great chapter. I especially liked Jenna getting beaten about like that, it brings me joy. Those Vikings were little badasses!
Sometimes I wonder why you do this to yourself :D
But thank you. I think you'll like the next chapter even more.