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Reviewer: Stubbornstain Signed [Report This]
Date: May 01 2014 8:16 AM Title: Chapter 7

Why does it take a fatality to wake everybody up? Surely if things were that bad Ava and/or Alex would defect or protest. They could go towards Canada like the escapee slaves of yesteryear did. And, I’m sure the Chinese or the Russians or some other country would give them a home.

Here:

Ava smile knowing that everything would be alright now.

You mean: smiles



Author's Response:

It wouldn't work

Reviewer: chrlorez Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: May 01 2014 2:01 AM Title: Chapter 7

Love the chapter and the character developments.

But all this chapter makes me think off is how Ryan's going to die. Cause let's be honest. His sole existence in this story is for him to die painfully. You have written a completely irredeemable character.

My guess is either in battle against the Chinese mega, or near-suicide mission into the factory to get the mega antidote. Or both.

 



Author's Response:

Lol never try and figure out a story ahead of time. Just because you may see a pattern or the set up may seem noticeable doesn't mean it is. 

Reviewer: highheight Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: April 30 2014 7:28 PM Title: Chapter 7

Yay, another chapter! This one was everything I expected and more, each time Ryan comes into the picture I grit my teeth in anger! I wonder why he wants the information on jaden, maybe it's to hold him down, or maybe it's to kill him, or maybe it's so that he can become a mega for either a final fight or to get Jaden to join him, the possibilities are endless however I hope for the final fight, can't wait until the next chapter! Keep up the good work.

Reviewer: tinyguy Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: April 30 2014 6:43 PM Title: Chapter 7

Great chapter. Ryan sure seems like complete jackass, especially since he runs the project/town. Hope things work out for Jaden... But something tells me that won't happen for a while

Reviewer: gadgetmawombo Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: April 30 2014 6:31 PM Title: Chapter 7

How is this guy supposed to be stopped? He not only holds incredible physical power but has an entire military behind him...I'm still not sure how such a nutjob was put into a position of power but I guess there are plenty of nutjobs in positions of power in real life so it makes sence.

Great story, I'm liking where this is going.

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